Poetry / Lover's Kiss

How would I describe a lover’s kiss?
Would that the whisper of the wind,
caress my cheek;
Or the rising of the winter’s moon,
grace my lips;
Or the setting sun’s fiery passion,
hold me close;
None would compare,
to a lover’s kiss,
For it is the whisper of the wind,
The rise of the wintry moon,
and the passion of the setting fiery sun,
it is all this and more.
For it is mine, and meant for me alone.

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April 26, 2007

CA

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CA reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I’m sorry but I’m just not a fan of this poem. Shall I compare thee to a summer’s day? The imagery that you use is pretty cliche to be honest and to have all 3 images repeated really doesn’t help matters. Try re-writing and get specific about the imagery and what it makes you feel, rather than hiding your feelings in stock images.