Poetry / Addict and Elitist
Knowing you is like
being part of a club
Yea, well I’m tired
of paying dues
Of waking up early
on Tuesday morning
Because you’re on acid
and ready to talk
You tell me to get
a pen and paper
No, wait, better yet
a tape recorder
This is how you say
the Bible would be
In 2006
I say I don’t think
Jesus was lit
It starts
You give me your
filthy ideas for movies
and inventions I think
already exist
Life mottos that sound
more like bumper stickers
than mantra
Are you getting this?
Are you getting this?
Yea, I say
I’ve got it all
right here
When it’s enough
You close back up
and cannot be pried
open by paramedics
Do I love it?
Yea, sometimes
Because knowing you
Really knowing you
is like going to a bar
where everybody else
has to scream out
“vodka and tonic”
WAIT
holding out their money
And I just sit still
without a penny
and get served exactly
what I was craving
Do I hate it?
Yea, sometimes
When I drink you too quick
because everyone is
toasting me and cheering
to things I don’t care about
And I slip away to vomit
clutch some strange toilet
Sometimes no water can
make it better in the morning
I go to work and my
supervisor starts writing
negative comments to be
discussed at my review
But I’m here now
So really
what do you think?
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interesting… i dont know, are you speaking to yourself, to alcohol, or to someone else? to the person alcohol makes you?
i can really identify wiht this poem, i mean- almost all of my poems are about something that has happened in my life, some more straightforward than others. i am an alcoholic, among other things, so this spoke to me personally.
i didnt quite get the bar scene, the part about vodka and tonic, but i do love that drink. anyway
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Conversation pieces are difficult to execute, and you get this mostly right here. I love the words and scene descriptions, but its very hard to follow the conversation of who is saying what.
I love pieces like this, and you’ve got huge potential here. I would suggestion splitting this into two columns. That would make it easier to follow who is saying what.
Overall, good stuff that I would love to see a revision on.
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