Poetry / Taste it

I love the 3rd stanza, and the first 3 lines of the last stanza.  The only thing I can honestly say I don’t like is the very last line.  I think the rest is straightforward and sends a clear and powerful message.  However, the last 2 stanzas seem to be written with more … not feeling, but passion.  This is overall a very well written poem, but I like the 2nd half more because it seems to be more passionate about the subject matter.

Hello there,

I have mixed feelings about this poem I like some of the lines especially “Play around too long and you’ll forget who to be
Tho have you ever known, care to tell me?”. However I feel it doesn’t flow well it feels a bit disjointed in places, I feel if it could flow and roll of the tounge better It would be an improvement.

I enjoyed reading this piece. I liked the irony of little miss perfect, and the hasty suggestions the narrator gives to her. This would make a great song, I think. Very excellent prose and even better unique style. Very modern, yet not monotone. I enjoyed this all the way.