Poetry / This poem sucks

this poem sucks
I’ve only just begun it and I can already tell that it sucks
this is boring and repetitive
this is a spit in the face of the men that slaved for it’s ink
a mockery to the trees that died for it’s creation.
I haven’t written anything for months and when I finally force myself
this is all that I can come up with
pointless free verse
this verse doesn’t deserve to be free
it should be imprisoned I should be imprisoned
imprisoned in the halls of stale molding artist
if I was successful once it would be OK
people would only think I ran out of ideas
they would say “Well this shit sucks but his early stuff rocks”
but I’ve never been successful
so I have no right to suck now
you have to earn the right to suck this bad
you can’t just do it any way
there are rules to art
and I broke em all
the has been that never was
wasted madness
wasted insanity
just plane wasted
this poem doesn’t even justify my drugs

maybe that is the problem
drugs
sex
madness
suicide for those too afraid to die
I guess I an’t Hunter S Thompson
I guess I an’t much
and I know an’t isn’t a word
I just don’t give a shit
is this style
or a lack of creativity
then again maybe style is a lack of creativity

what?
what?
what the fuck am I talking about
I forget
fuck it Let’s get drunk
Let’s get laid
Let’s get fucked up beyond belief
because if I survive this one it will be the best poem I ever wrote
and I will keep writing it until the day I die

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July 04, 2006

Purpledawncloud

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Purpledawncloud reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I’ve written quite a few like this when I’m in a slump too, some turn out pretty good some don’t such is life,right? I think it would have been better to stop at “is this style
or a lack of creativity
then again maybe style is a lack of creativity” but thats just my opinion.
Keep writing.. it always comes back even better,especially the next time your not expecting it.

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July 01, 2006

dawnsday

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dawnsday reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

writing about writing. i’m sure we all sit there and hate on our writing and then turn around and have that very poem or story praised by someone else. we reply “whatever it sucks”. thanks for putting that on paper. i like the last two lines. sometimes it does feel like if you can just finish this last paragraph, poem, line, then you can just move on. you may want to run spell check, but the mistakes aren’t distracting.