Poetry / Lip Fixation

Your mouth…
soft moist skin pillows baked golden brown
like sugar cookies
creases so delicate like Utopian valleys
words sliipin out and drippin off
those lips like maple syrup, putting your
listener into a state of heavenly coma…
the tongue in your mouth, such a sly
slippery devilish snake that laps against
the white cages of your teeth…
the warm wet human feather that
pleasures the earlobe and other things…
In love I am with your mouth,
that delightful fixture on your face…
The words you speak from it sends chills,
a cold whisper from your lips makes me
burn with lust from the pit of my soul…
To taste the juices of your mouth is
like sippin on a forbidden nectar of
human paradise, that makes my head swirl…
I’m drunk
drunk on the yumminess of our
tongues touching, overlapping, dancing,
moving together unified
I’m drunk on your lips as they
press against mine and I lose
my memory,
I forget everything I’ve everything I’ve ever
known because…
because I can’t even remember
what I was about to say
because…
Your mouth

written 31 Oct 2000

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July 18, 2006

Deleted User

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great study in obsession.  i had to take a deep breath and remember you weren’t talkin to me lol

your passion and power is vital here.

your descriptive language without settling on overt and nasty is what holds the tension.

love it love you

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July 14, 2006

imranda

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imranda reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Passionate, yet it steers clear of being too passionate… if you know what I mean. I like it. I like it a lot. It says you wrote it on Halloween… that’s interesting. but yeah, it’s very good, and I also think you should know that your imagery is excellent. You really make the reader see what you’re seeing.

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July 14, 2006

by D_S_Washington

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I wrote this poem while in basic training… so, i did not realize it was halloween… it was stil a training day, and one of the guys in my platoon had the most beautiful lips that i couldn’t help staring at

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July 04, 2006

Purpledawncloud

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Purpledawncloud reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Very sexy poem.I happen to be a fan of beautiful lips and of kissing so.. I can understand how a hot kiss like that could make you drunk and forget what you wanted to say next! Good job and I’m looking forward to more of this kind of work.

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