Lyrics / Altered Shades
A crystalline sky of blue
paints over the day
all seems pleasant
all seem true
not until a sea of green
floods the masterpiece
are the true colours shown
reds of brimstone and conforming greys
rush through the thick liquid beauty
inseminating all that I knew
I held the green pigment
close to my heart
and found it warmed my mind
yet through all the distortion
and illogical proportions
I could go back to it over time
Not until my new day had adjusted
and the colours had settled
did a new hue present itself
An unspeakable shade
that held infinite grace
fell down through the solemn sky
Just a single drop
swirled into the piece
but every shade involved
was forever changed
An incomprehensible aura
was washed over the paint
and revealed a new beautiful world
It was all as I remember
but divine at the same time
leaving me with a blessed scar
I walk along the same blue sky
just see the clouds more abstract
while holding my own thoughts high
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Unique. The simplicity, though, (there being only two chunks of words) may be what bothered me when I read it. Separating it into more comprehensive chunks allow the words to flow better. Love the title, obviously works with the lyrics. I see this more like a poem than a song…I would imagine finding a cadence to fit the words would be hard. The entire thing is so metaphorical, the colors representing changes in your life, I see it more as a poem.
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hi,
well i am a fan of what you call abstract, when you definitely have to read between the lines. this piece was vivid and full of great imagery!
i shall list the verses i truly loved:
Just a single drop
swirled into the piece
but every shade involved
was forever changed
An incomprehensible aura>>
and this
It was all as I remember
but divine at the same time
leaving me with a blessed scar>>
i’d recommend you writing more of the same. it works for me!
solange~
THIS PIECE SOUNDS MORE LIKE A POEM INSTEAD OF LYRICS.
“A crystalline sky of blue
paints over the day
all seems pleasant
all seem true
not until a sea of green….”
I LOVE THE USE OF EXTENTED METAPHORS BUT THIS COULD CONFUSE THE LISTENERS IF THIS PIECE IS TRANSFERRED INTO A SONG.
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