Poetry / Fragile Handle With Care

Trapped
in a wrapping
I made myself
change the package
I still won’t sell
look inside
what does this
pretty paper hide
the dents and dings
from past handling
they are under repair
and will soon be almost new
if sold for the price of love
and handed to you

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July 13, 2006

Strass

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40	80.0% (10 votes)	69.4%

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Strass reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I just love this piece. I love poems with double meanings. Very clever and well written

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July 13, 2006

jentoo

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jentoo reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

It’s uncanny how alike our voice is. I have a poem written years ago using much the same imagery. So, of course I like it because I get it. Is there a reason for not using punctuations or capitalizing the beginning of some lines? I don’t think it would take away from it if you did. I just wonder what your thought process was behind it. As is, you convey a stream of consciousness, a revery.