Lyrics / A Dream of Today

Solemnly, a leaf inspires and sways along the wind
And deep within the callow minds
that mold and shape the current times
A genuine thought is faintly voiced
but doesn’t shine on through the light
and all that’s ever seen is gold

No one tries to understand
and no one gives an honest hand
So I collect the ostracized
and try to mend them the best I can

Now I wander through the lane
layed out with blue rain and worry
before I noticed the vacant tears of the people
They all fall from the same eyes
gliding along the pseudo tide of the new day
and into littered but solitary streams nearby

No one bothers to derive
and no one tries to actualize
so now percipitation that lacks origination
falls from a cloudless sky

So I dream deep in a sea of leaves
fingers fluently splashing through the breeze
I lay, distanced from softly spoken words of creed
I subtly reach and take my own desolate hand
while basking in the all-but shimmering sand
and hold onto this distant land, while I still can

Through all of the memories of tall grass
and all the times of woven cracks
I still stand grasping at some slight tranquility
and continue to run far from anonymity
looking for an echo to call my own

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October 04, 2009

Alex_Bruinekool

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January 05, 2008

cooljim102055

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54	M	Taunton, MA	November 20

cooljim102055 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

hi there,

i read your lyric and liked it/very poetic/but poetic songs are very hard to sing/can you sing this?/i luv the line layed out with blue rain and worry/and the last line also/looking for an echo to call my own/the only negative thing i can really see is that you didn’t mention the title throughout the song/though that’s what it’s about the people have to know the name of it..but in general..good job

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July 20, 2006

Ravenmaster

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21	M	United States	June 21

Ravenmaster reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

The first stanza is good, with a nice Simon and Garfunkel feel, but the flow disappears at the word ‘catechized’ and the proceeding line. What kind of style were you going for? The last line is quite nice, and would serve great as a sudden ending.