Poetry / Heroes

I dont know why, at least I dont think I know, but I really like this poem. I must admit I was intrigued from seeing the title, and so I figured i’d take a gander.
It struck a chord with me I must say, I’m a big geek when it comes to superheroes!

The imagery in this poem though, is really good, and the layout is definitely though provoking, did you genuinely mean for some of the words to rhyme?
This poem flows really well to be honest, my favourite bit has to be:

you look super
man.

It just struck a chord!
The only quirk I find is “(Can I give you a red ‘S’?)”, to me that just didnt seem to fit in with the rest of the poem, it kind of made the superhero obvious, and people could already guess from the “you look super//man.” line.

Anyway, I think that this was a really well written poem, you show some real originality here.

The format of your words grabbed my attention. I especially liked ” walking next to me  in full daylight”. Unmasked and open. An ephinany revealed.

Wow! Lots of talent! So it’s about being happy with what (who) you have? It’s very concise and so beautifully, modernly written! As with flow – I had to stop between “married” and “no matter”, but I think a space there would take away from the meaning, so I’d put “as long as” on the next line, to give breathing room in the middle. But the beginning and end are just perfect!

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July 24, 2008

by davidblaine

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Thanks, this is an old one.  I hadn’t thought about it in a long time.

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that is amazing i believe. i have never read a poem like that before in that such style. it is really really good and thats a form of poetry i now like thanks to you.

i also like how its a classic poem with a super hero, and how it is all spaced and set out like that.

well done, very well done.

Instead of separating the lines how about just dropping them down. I guess I’m not getting this.  Whats makes someone that you are attracted to a hero?  I’m confused by the poem itself.  It’s not that I don’t like it.  You have a way with turning a  phrase that I can appreciate.  It’s just the message that I’m lacking.

this is very good but i think that the structure of the piece was a but abnormal but it was interesting. i feel compelled to write something about my heroes now
you have unleashed the beast now.
good work

Nice piece about needing that hero of a real man instead of all the fake mumbo jumo they have on television.
I just wondered what the spaces between were for?

Nicely done. Great poem. Great flow. Awesome message. Clean, crisp, and visually appealing.

Hi there,

I thought the imagery in this poem was quite startling. It was beautifully written, and I liked the format (this from someone who isn’t a huge fan of alternative/experimental/post modern formats).

Clean and clever – I liked it very much.

Mo

I found this to quite clever and imaginative. I like the way it seems to almost ramble while relentlessly proceeding to its destination. I enjoyed the imagery, having been raised on Spiderman and the Fantastic Four. I also wholeheartedly agree with the sentiments expressed.
Well Done!
Chris
B.Nice