No, I wasent speaking of abortion. However I know for a fact that if I did write something about abortion, it would be alot to take. I was actually making reference to myself. If I consider myself my enemy, am I supposed to cut my heart from my body can cradle it like a mother to her infant? The very heart that has lead me to disregard my faith, family and friends? The very heart that refuses to stop beathing though I do all that I can to still its whisper. How can you love something that has destroyed everything for you?
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Non-fiction / Forgive Me Father, for I have sinned.
I read the words like pages from the bible. They are so true, yet it is so hard to believe them. As humans, it is in our nature to question everything even what is right before our eyes. We also question ourselves. I taste the honesty on my lips, or could it just be the wine? I turned away that which would benefit me most, only to find that life is never the same. We all regret that of which we cannot change. Once it’s done its done, and like the sinner who cast the first stone, the rest of my life I shall repent. My faith is shattered my God is none, yet I still weep for the baby. Am I to go on living with the demons that haunt me? Can I ever wake up, and this all be forgiven? Or better yet, forgotten. They say to love they enemy, but what do you do if your enemy is within. Do I cut it out of me only to comfort it to my bosom? I cannot do such. I cannot love something I loathe. While you go on living in atheist bliss, I shall be here believing only in the blood that flows through my veins and believing in the fear that I have for my soul. I have committed every sin, even murder. I have stoned the child within to live the martyr of a lie. Days fly by, without a second thought of yourself, or for me. I know this but I try and do all I can to forget. It is not like breathing as it is for you. The cum from my sexual nature is the bread of my life. For I am one sinner.
For I am your modern day Judas.
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RedBelle reviewed Version 1 -
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I realize you’re going for an “old english” style, but you have some typos, punctuation, and cleaning to do here.
I feel the despair, but wonder if it’s not a bit overwrought. What you’re describing, if I’m interpreting correctly, is very real. The conflict many women feel in making this decision is very profound. While I sense the point of this piece is simply to capture the sadness and guilt, it might be interesting to follow the process to its inevitable conclusion of either acceptance or destruction.
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thesnoopyone reviewed Version 1 -
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Well that kind of lamenting is for people who pay mere lip service. However I don’t think you are alone in this way of thinking and publishing these profound thoughts is brave. We are always repenting for something aren’t we. I thought this was well written and thought provoking.
BJRyddoch reviewed Version 1 -
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A very strong veiwpoint – the ridiculousness of the bible is so apparrent within almost every single fictional page.
My faourite line was – ‘My faith is shattered my God is none, yet I still weep for the baby’
meesha_duva reviewed Version 1 -
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Very interesting. I could see this being expanded or shortened into a poem. I sense the confusion of “knowing” there is a God and yet still not believing. I have many of those feelings myself. So as one Judas to another, nice job!
barb reviewed Version 1 -
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i love this piece of work!!! So discriptive. You are very talented. i love the line: ” They say to love thy enemy, but what do you if your enemy is within.” i have been there. Awesome line, but sad. Are you speaking of abortion? Anyways, i loved it!!
onlyadreamer reviewed Version 1 -
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Very well written. Just a few spelling/grammatical things that could be fixed.
You approach a very touchy subject eloquently.
FredBanister reviewed Version 1 -
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There are cliches and distorted sayings from the Bible. I dont know who you are, but there isnt enough of it. Most importantly, implement specific details and events from your own life. You have a lot of questions and thoughts that are generic and unfinished. I still dont know why you, specifically, are Judas.
drewgoddess reviewed Version 1 -
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This is a strong piece. And you found a way to make everyone relate to it. I like it. Definitely one of my favorites now.
livwicca reviewed Version 1 -
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I don’t know exactly how to make this better? In my opinion, it comes across like a rant. Somewhat purposeless. Sorry.
CrazyBeautiful reviewed Version 1 -
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Ummm….okay. I understand what you’re trying to say here, but your biblical language is forced and distracting. Your points are so simplistic that they don’t need extravagant language. I’m really not sure what the point of this was, other than a ramble, which serves its own purpose, I guess. The second to last sentence is not really necessary and actually takes away from the piece. First of all, a mature adult knows that “cum” is actually spelled “come,” even as a sexual term. And I think you could find a better word than “come.”
Blogs are better left as blogs. They don’t have a place on this site, and they lack in literary value.
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