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Poetry / My Softer Side
- Loving you I can feel again
Touching you I can breathe
Knowing that you’re by my side
Puts our worlds at ease
- Thoughts flow through veins
Memories caught in the mind
Our futures known from one moment
Finding we are not the last of our kind
- The talk
The meeting; The kiss…The first kiss
The one night
Then it stays like this
- Sensations are irreplaceable
There is nothing you do not fulfill
Our hearts and souls have become one
“Stay with me?” is whispered, “Yes, I will”
Copyright January,2006
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Very nicely put. You have coughed up a very pretty love-ball. Sorry for the metaphor. I like that you have put down an emotion for us all to share. I have only one suggestion. In the first stanza you are refering to how you feel about another and then the last line of the stanza says “Puts our worlds at ease”. Can I suggest “Puts my world at ease”. Then your second stanza brings the two of you together. Thank you for sharing such a nice poem.
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Good poem. I found it interesting and creative. Good work.
I really like the end. It’s a little jarring that the style switched halfway through.
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