Poetry / Finger-tipped Etchings

Sweet uttered tenderness  
wraps gently
around the mind,
intertwined in
silence…
Subtle captivation
remembered from
another time

                 Hands
                 softly glide
                 leaving behind
                 permanent etchings
                 on the skin
                 Felt and remembered
                 oh so slight
                 the touch

                               The face embraced
                               by gentle hands,
                               those extensions
                               spread gracefully,
                               touching slowly
                                     each
                                     and
                                     every
                                     curve
                               surely to mesmerize,
                               and memorize

                                            Tranquility
                                            found within
                                            the silence,
                                            hidden behind
                                            closed eyes
                                            Recollections of fires
                                            ignited by
                                            simply traced
                                            strokes,
                                            upon ones lips

                                                    Reflections of each  
                                                    found imprinted
                                                    within,
                                                    finger-tipped
                                                    etchings.

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November 26, 2006

Willow_Wren

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Willow_Wren reviewed Version 2 - Read 100%% of the Item

This is very beautiful and haunting and I love the opening three lines and yet for all its potential it really doesn’t go anywhere except to extoll upon the caresses of face, the eyes, the lips, albeit beautifully expressed. Who is this one who is so cherished? And why? I think the extended act of touching goes on too long with no other action or meaning to justify it for so long a poem. If there were a question to be asked or answered, a reason for this beautiful refrain, I think you would have a poem of more substance, and I woulnd’t give up on this one, but keep working on it.

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November 28, 2006

by Arorasky

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Thank you for your review and input…in some ways I think you may have answered the whole purpose of this one..it’s not about the who or whom so much as it’s about the “beautiful and haunting & the caresses of face, the eyes, the lips”.  Sometimes I find myself wondering why there seems to be so much need today to..have more ..different details…”A question to be asked or answered…hmm on that one…I’ll think” thank you, as always

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November 08, 2006

debby_GREENEYEZ

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debby_GREENEYEZ reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I enjoyed this piece and I thought the flow was very good and the content was easy flowing and passion. good Job.

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November 08, 2006

by Arorasky

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Thank you, hearing that it flows easily helps a lot…

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October 27, 2006

Suz

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Suz reviewed Version 2 - Read 100%% of the Item

Wonderful! How did I miss this one?

I like the “play” with structure.

Your words create a very visual ‘etching’.

Very nice.

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October 27, 2006

by Arorasky

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thanks I will admit though that I had only started the play with “each, and, every, curve”  I got some insight from another urbis user “willbusch” on how to restructure the rest..I had been playing with it and just couldn’t figure out “whichwaydoIgo”..his input and suggestion for this style fixed what seemed unfinished to me.  See anything needs fixin would love to know.

October 27, 2006

by Suz

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Nothing I see needs ‘fixin’. That’s why I gave it a 10.

October 27, 2006

by Arorasky

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oooh thank you…I just saw that this second time back here…I was just gonna ask what you’re doin awake in the middle of the night..but HAH it’s me whose up in the middle of the night not you.  Thank you..cause I know your reviews are good for catching things I might miss.

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