Novel Treatments / Section 2 or maybe 3
POINTE WASHINGTON
“Maddie, You know Poppa told you and Jacy not to take King Creole out yet, He isn’t ready to ride this soon after getting here.” J.D said to his little sister. Poppa had bought the horse for Maddie because she was such an Elvis fan, and because he’d found out the animal had been abused by his previous owners. Angus could never and would never stand by and do nothing while any of God’s creatures suffered. He had the means and the power to put a stop to it, as well a heart big enough to handle it. “Big brother you worry too much, He’s going to do just fine, aren’t you big boy?” Maddie told him as she helped Jacy finish putting the English saddle onto her mount. Jacy wasn’t a very experienced rider, so Maddie chose a mare named Intimidate Her. She was the most docile and well-mannered horse in the McPherson stables; Jacy was as safe on her as if she were being held in her Grandma’s arms. J.D. waved the teenaged girls off as he said “Do what you want, you’ve been Poppa’s ‘Angel Baby’ since you were born.”
“ J.D.” Maddie giggled, “At your age you’re still jealous.” Both siblings knew the phrase was a running joke between them. Neither one of them had any hard feelings towards the other. The held an equal share of their father’s love.
As the girls rode out of the barn and into path that led to the road, Maddie did appear angelic. Her untamable tresses were pulled back into a ponytail but as usual she had escapees from the elastic band which held them, giving off a halo effect in the sunshine. They rode out towards the back end of McPherson property where it bordered CR393 at the dirt end. Ahead of them was Sparkler Bay, their destination for a picnic. They liked to sit on blankets and watch the boats go by. Most of the time they watched to see if any attractive men happened to be out fishing, or crabbing, or just hanging out on the water. Being tucked away at an all girls’ school, neither of them had any experience with boys. Unless of course you counted their rich fantasy lives. Whenever the two had encountered the opposite sex Maddie felt she was unattractive, and became shy and nervous, rendering her silent. Jacy on the other hand was non-stop babble, as always; this seemed to scare boys away so neither girl was yet to go on a date. Nothing could stop them from looking, or talking to each other about them. “Maddie, do you think that studly fella we saw last Saturday will be out again today? You remember the one with the big number three on his black cap. I could swear he was really staring at you as his boat was going by. He wants you. I just know it. I think you should go out with him when he asks you. He is going to. I can feel it.”
“Jacy, he was fifty yards out on a boat, how can you see all of that?” “I just know these things. Didn’t I tell you my great-great grandmother Jacenda was a Gypsy fortuneteller?” Jacy went on about the eye-catching teenager, causing Maddie’s thoughts to drift to the mental picture of him, and not pay close enough attention to the terrain they were riding. He was a handsome thing all right, close to six feet tall, with sandy blonde hair that was cut into the latest fashion, they called it the mullet short in the front and on the sides, but long and curly in the back. He had not been wearing a shirt and Maddie remembered the way the muscles of his back moved under his suntanned flesh.
Neither girl nor horse saw the rattler that bit Intimidate Her causing the mare to rear up in pain. Jacy slid right out of the saddle and on to the ground. Maddie screamed, but was not able to calm her horse and the injured one, before the rattler‘s poison began to take effect on the mare, she fell over right on top of the unconscious Jacy. As Maddie was trying to calm King Creole down, out of nowhere the very boy in question grabbed King Creole’s bridle and was able to soothe the beast enough for Maddie to dismount. “How can I help?” She heard him say as she rushed to her best friend. Jacy’s head was bleeding a little from her falling on a rock; the real concern was to get her out from under the dying horse. “Help me pull her out. We‘ve got to get her out from under there.” The boy took one of Jacy’s arms and Maddie took the other, with all the strength they could muster, her limp and battered body was freed. “Thank You. Thank You. Thank You. You kept her alive.” Maddie cried repeatedly as she felt her dearest friend’s pulse weakly beating. “Hey, I hear you. It’s all right we’ll get her into my dad’s truck and to the hospital.”
“I wasn’t talking to you! Haven’t you ever heard anybody pray before?” Maddie was a little ticked off at him anyway, had her thoughts not been on him, this might never have happened. Still her rudeness shocked her; he was a total stranger yet she was talking to him like she’d known him all of her life.
He picked Jacy up and into his strong arms as if she were light as a feather. As he laid the girl in the bed of the yellow and white Ford, he said; “I’m Teddy Brownell, I was on my way to the bay when I saw your horses spook, what caused them to react like that?”
“I don’t know. I do know were lucky you were headed this way, and I’m sorry I snapped at you back there. Oh by the way, my name is Maddie and this is Jacy. I‘ll ride back here with her in case she wakes up on the way.” Ted sped towards the hospital, checking her out in the rear view mirror. She was a babe, that was for sure. He had always been partial to redheads, but those pale blonde curls of hers were radical. Then there were her long, slender legs in those tight designer jeans. ’Damn, I wonder what those legs of hers look like without them Calvin Klein’s, I wonder what’s under them Oakley’s she’s wearing.’
Once they got to the E.R., where the expert personnel began working on Jacy, Maddie made a frantic call to her father; Teddy was by her side as she explained what had happened. After hanging up the telephone, in tears Teddy suggested they walk over to the cafeteria for a soda, he could see this fine-looking chic was afraid for her friend and wanted to calm her fears.
Angus, Jensen and Penelope rushed into the waiting room as the boy and girl were returning. Maddie was swept up into her father’s arms. Father and daughter burst into tears. What seemed like hours later old Dr. Jameson calmly strode out of the O.R. to talk to the Halliwells.
“Young Jacy is going to be just fine, but I’m afraid I do have some bad news. There was a great deal of damage to her uterus. It’s going to be full of scar tissue we did all we could; She will never be able to have children.”
“ I want specialists brought in.” Angus bellowed. “Spare no expense, I’ll pay for everything, Jenson after all, this happened on our property, and one of my horses did this to the child. I‘d have the animal destroyed if that cursed serpent hadn‘t already done the deed.”
Penelope crossed herself clutching her rosary to her breast as she thanked both the Lord and Angus for their generosity.
Maddie couldn’t seem to stop crying, even after Teddy put his strong arms around her and held her close. The feel of his sinewy body with only denim between them sent a shockwave of mixed emotions running through her. She liked the sensation of a man’s flesh so close to her. But the guilt she experienced at finding pleasure while the girl who was closer to her heart than her own little sister could ever be, was in so much pain, was almost unbearable. Her sobs became louder as the guilt grew. Ted didn’t know what to do for her, so he let her go. Angus quickly took his place and Maddie’s tears subsided.
Jacy stayed in the hospital for a week while specialists from all over the country examined her and ran a complete barrage of tests. Unfortunately they all concurred with Dr. Jamison’s original diagnosis. Every day Maddie was there to comfort her friend. They talked about the accident, and Jacy asked about the boy who had saved her life. “I wish I could see him and thank him some time.”
Thursday afternoon, as Maddie was walking back to her car, her heart skipped a beat. She saw Teddy pulling into the parking space next to the Heartbreaker Pink convertible 1956 Thunderbird. “Hey there, I was hoping I’d get to see you too. How is Jacy? I brought her some flowers. I’m a little nervous about going up to her room alone, so will you walk back up with me?” “Sure, I’d be glad to. The doctors told her today there‘s no hope for children in her future. She’s been crying all morning. ” Maddie told him. Upstairs in room 211, while Jacy babbled and gushed her thanks to Teddy, Maddie felt guilty a little. She wanted to be with him alone someplace without her girlfriend’s incessant chatter. She had been at ease with him, that day after the accident. He was the first boy she wasn’t afraid of.
In the elevator, on the way back to the parking area ,Maddie’s eyes drift towards Teddy, his face in nose was distinctly Italian while his cheekbones were high and sharp like a proud Cherokee. The skin taut and bronzed from the sun with richly tinted cherry undertones stole her attention. A blush colored Maddie’s cheeks she felt she could spend the rest of her days gazing enraptured at this man. Teddy interrupted her scandalous trance by saying “ Listen Maddie, are you hungry? If you like we could go to McDonalds. I haven’t eaten yet, and I hate doing it by myself.” Maddie’s blush deepens at the mental picture the phrase conjures in her head. “Sure, I’d like that a lot,” she answers. In an attempt to impress him she offered, “Would you like to take my car?”
“That’d be cool, I’ve been wondering how that baby rides. She got a kick out of the way he rolled his blue jeans into those little tight cuffs. That was the rage, pegged jeans with docksiders.
Ted came around to see Maddie a lot that summer because of it she was spending less and less time with Jacy. To Jacy, already depressed about not being able to have the huge family she longed for, being without her best friend was even more upsetting. Maddie sensed this and decided to ask Teddy to set her up with his friend Bryan. “Maddie this might not be such a good idea, you don’t know Bryan, he thinks he’s a stud. He goes out with a different girl every weekend. Are you sure Jacy can handle a guy like that right now?” Teddy questioned. Maddie answered” Teddy Bear it’s only a date, I’m not trying to get them married. It’s just one harmless little date. Teddy knew he couldn’t say no to those mesmerizing bright green eyes. After a moment’s hesitation Teddy relented “Okay Maddie, I only want to make you happy.”
The date was set for Saturday night at 7:00. Jacy came to Maddie’s house to get ready; Jacy was actually excited because she had never really been on a real date. Maddie was happy to see enthusiasm in her friend’s eyes. “Should I wear a mini, or Capri pants? What if he thinks I’m too fat? I wonder if he’ll try to kiss me. Have you seen him? Is he cute? Am I wearing too much eye shadow? Maddie help me out here!” The old Jacy was back.
“Wear the mini, your legs are beautiful and you know you are the perfect size. If he tries to kiss you let him, if you like him, slap the piss out of him if you don’t. No, I don’t know what he looks like. And finally, your eye shadow can never be too heavy, just look where it’s gotten Cyndi Lauper and Madonna!” Maddie exclaimed.
The guys arrived right on time in Bryan’s beat up Camero. Jacy was a little turned off by the car’s appearance; she’d thought it would at least be all one color and not a mixture of primer gray and turd brown. But maybe he was saving up for a new paint job, she hoped. Teddy impressed both girls by making introductions in the proper manner, “Miss Jacy Halliwell, may I present Bryan Whitfield, Bryan, This gorgeous creature is Jacy Halliwell.” Maddie smiled and winked at him, to let him know she was proud of him.
“T has told me a lot about you, but he couldn’t come close to describing your beauty in mere words.” Bryan drawled seeming a little like Rhett Butler. Jacy was impressed, as she climbed in the front seat of what she pictured as a rolling turd. The thought made her giggle out loud. Bryan continued to pour on the charm all the way to Hideaway Diner. During the drive Jacy never heard a peep out of the backseat of the rolling turd. Teddy and Maddie were too busy making out to notice the prattle going on in the front seat.
At dinner, Maddie and Jacy both were appalled by Bryan’s poor table manners. Jacy mused at the notion of how someone who began the encounter so eloquently turned out to be utterly clueless at table. He chewed with his mouth open, talked with food in his mouth. The last straw was when he speared a meatball off Jacy’s plate she couldn’t keep quiet anymore. “Bryan have you ever heard of Emily Post? Do you know the meaning of the word etiquette? Has no one ever told you, you eat like a pig? If you think your charm and good looks are enough to impress a lady, you are sadly mistaken!” she fumed. Maddie giggled as Bryan says “Yo T. I think she wants me.”
“Freakazoid!” With that Teddy waved the waitress over asking for the check. “Cough up your half Freakazoid. It’s time to take the ladies home.”
Later that night at Jacy’s house, Maddie apologized for turning her first date into a hellish night. “Maddie it’s not your fault, Teddy is a sweetheart, who knew he could be friends with such a dweeb.” Jacy replied. “I think he has other friends if you want to try again next weekend.” Offered Maddie. “That’s quite all right; I think I’ll just wait for Mr. Right to show up on his own.” Jacy stated emphatically.
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