Non-fiction / Letters to Him

CALL ME

You know of my ability to see weakness and strength in others. It affords me a confidence to observe myself caring. Life provides us with a foundation that we build upon by adding strength in character through a purposeful will. Our choices and decisions make us who we are.  Discovery of self begins with an understanding of how others evaluate us. Essentially we are what we do.
We are all living and breathing mirrors of each other, and when we see weakness in another, our first reaction is to recoil or most often to take the mirror away, sometimes, by breaking it.  I believe the most popular metaphor is that of a vampire. They refuse to be seen in a mirror because they have no reflection. No sense of self. They are reminded that they have no purpose, no will other than to suck that which they do not possess, or have the courage to obtain, a life.  I find myself in moments of clarity remembering our time together and what effect on my life it’s really had.  I am filled with gratitude for such a deep and profound glance into my very own eyes. It is not enough that I asked you for the soothing physical, but also did you embrace my spirit and move me to the next plane of existence, a much higher level of vibration.  I feel as if the student who after absorbing intensely, an understanding of you, is gifted for this simple pleasure, with all the missing pieces that were needed to make me whole once again.  You saw me and saw yourself, as you said, but at a time when you were lost.  
But this is the point I’m making. There’s a difference.  You’re a man, and I’m a woman. As a woman I am coming to understand my needs and desires. It such a beautiful process. It is here that I ask for one last thing of you.  I ask for the sound of your voice, to speak, to converse, to continue with this creation a bond that fills us both. I am learning how to take only that which is given.  It is what you’ve shown me in the way of mutual respect.  But by the very nature of this renewed, propelling force in my life now, must our speaking to each other end?  Isn’t life based on our relationships not only with where we place ourselves in the world, but with whom we have around us? My love for you is simple and yes, unrefined, but true love none the less and in it’s birth cannot there be, without either one of us feeling depleted or used, a balance of self, of world, the keys to a happy life. These feelings I have, are true, and I need to express myself to you. Forgive me if there is pain here, but it is because more than likely, I do not understand.

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thom avatar General Friend

November 12, 2006

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thom reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

It seems more like a long poem. I am not sure if this is to be a short story or if this could be coming out of a novel. I feel the language is too poetic for non fiction.
I would also like to know more about the man from your work. I believe I would be more vested in the story if I knew more about him or the relationship.

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November 08, 2006

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MamaReen reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I really need to show this to a couple people and I hope that is okay, I’m going to add it to my faves and I don’t know, cry sometime soon because it hits so close to home, really. Heartbreak is happening all over the world and I really need to start writing about something happy!!! okay, new goal, let’s both write something happy within the next couple days okay? Thanks for this peace. Really.

mstreet avatar General Stranger

November 07, 2006

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This is very deep and very profound.  I had a hard time following it.  I understand the premise and what is driving the writing but for something that is not very long it is wordy.  Some of the things I noticed were, “confidence to observe myself caring.”  It takes another individual for you to recognize that you care?  That is confusing.  The next is (and maybe it is just that I disagree with the statement), “discovery of self begins with an understanding of how others evaluate us.  Essentially we are what we do.”  There is so much more that makes up a person.  Is that something you would consider reworking?  On the other hand, I loved the use of the vampire analogy.  What a great use of description.  I think your writing is excellent, and I greatly understand what she is referring to, but maybe a bit more of “real” language.  Otherwise, really good job.  Keep up the good work.

arlhope avatar General Stranger

November 06, 2006

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arlhope reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Interesting read…but, sometimes when we see weakness we look for the mirror in hopes of seeing something that will help us have a better understanding.

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