Poetry / Stroking Briones

That is so freakin’ hot how did you come up with that. It had me feeling like i was in the person’s mind. all i can say is WOW.

I like this.

I am a surfer and can completely relate to the connection with the water, the life force energy that pounds away and merges us to it when we are out at play!

Sex.

I like the rhythm and pace of this too.
I want to give this a really ‘critical’ critique’  but I think I have read it with my readers eyes and surfers eyes and cant now.

I just like it.  Thats that.

Thanks, I will save it to my favorites.

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March 02, 2008

by ae

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That’s a great critique, by me.  I offered the same only once or twice, when my visceral reaction to poem was such that afterwards, I couldn’t separate the work of the piece from the content.  Actually, I don’t think there’s a review I’d prefer more.  I’m humbled.  Thank you.

March 02, 2008

by ae

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Also, I certainly did NOT request a refund for this review, as Urbis is now telling me.  

Arrgh!  The machine is still broken!!

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Wonderfully done!  Read with or without the reader notes, I found this to be a masterful piece of writing.

I am not too certain of the line “impetuous to change,” but the rest was grand.

I really liked this one.  I am not a rower, but it still made me feel like one, which I thnk is an accmplishment.  I felt like I was there.  The rythme of it was good, and I was able to flow with the poem.

I like how you add the rowers commands, it seems to add a deeper layer to the poem good job

the end, in my mind, is sort the lone heartbeat in the void between your lobes, as you draw closer to the finish line at the climax of tension within the poem…the numerals signaling the lapsing meters between your boat and the finish-line…all in those last, silent moments when the presure in your head drowns out sound and all seems to stand near-inert…very well, executed…

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November 25, 2006

by ae

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that’s the lapsing strokes… the meters themselves just FLY!

Thanks for the thoughtful comments!

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Wonderful.  Without the explanation (I never read explanations until after I read the work) it is an amazingly seductive sexual experience, not needing to make sense for the experience of it is worth not knowing.  Then to reread it with the explanation is a whole new, but equally seductive, experience.  You’d best not publish this, or there will be more rowers than bodies of water to keep them afloat.  :>)

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November 25, 2006

by ae

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Ha!  I DID publish it, and read it at a regatta, to widespread blushing! But these are all actual things we say, in pretty much the order we say them.  Sigh.  It’s 13 years since I wrote this, since I was  even in a boat, and this poem still gives me that shiver and thrill.  And still embarrasses me a bit.  Thanks for appreciating it.  Counts extra, coming from you.

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Ah-hah!!  A rower!  If you hadn’t left an explanation I would of thought it something else altogether.  I loved it and still think it something else altogether.  I must say rowing must be extremely erotic.  Beautifully and powerfully written!  Nice job.

I didnt think I’d like it but I actually did. The layout was great, nicely speeding up and flowing right to the end and you conveyed a sense of purpose within the poem aswell. So yeah I enjoyed it.

I only know the basics when it comes to rowing, and that has only been picked up through my friends who do row. Yet through your poetry, you really convey the emotions.

The way you personify the water is very well done. Through the water being the lover we’re able to the conflict of the race. Likewise I really like comands, contrasting reality with the mental tug-a-war.