Lyrics / Kill Or Be Killed

I really love the whole concept of this.

the only line that i thought really didnt mesh well was “(Unite like…)” simply because its cliche, no offense. And while cliches can work sometimes I think that line takes away from this otherwise amazing piece.

[x] Jessika

I must say that I think you are underestimating yourself. You are correct, in that it does need some work. However, I think this piece has great potential. The 2nd and 3rd lines both begin with “Now”. I think if you take out the “Now” on the 2nd sentence, it would flow nicer. It is not needed on the 2nd one. Another, relatively minor fix, is the spelling, “dieing” is spelled dying. “All is fair in love in war” is a somewhat overly used phrase, however, at the same time, I think it could work here. Something to think about. Overall, I think this could be a wonderful piece. I can completely relate to your losing faith in the human race, I often feel that way, almost everytime I see another person do something horrible to another, as if they weren’t human and deserving to be treated as one. I hope you work on this, as I will anticipate the opportunity to read it in final.

i liked this a lot i could imagine it hearing it live , it would be great . great job , it flows nicely.

This is probably what most soldiers are feeling overseas right now. So many people say they don’t know the true reason why we are fighting, and so, they’re losing their faith in the cause. This is what I got from your lyrics. Let me know if I’m on the right track.

Good lyrics, RAGE / Pennywise “esque” – and we need more political statements made in music.  Unite like dynamite is a little cheesey.  I would break up the verses as they would be sung.  Good luck.

These lyrics are pretty good! I like the overall rhythm. The beginning starts out strong, the two opening lines are really engaging and visual. I found myself singing along in my mind. I really like this line: “We will avenge and even the score” and I like how you repeat the losing the faith…line over again. My only suggestions for improvement would be to work on the last line. I’m unclear on what “tack back the tours” means. These are realyl good lyrics and the song should end with a bang…maybe this line: I can’t go on I’m losing my faith Lost all hope in the human race”. Overall, good job!!!