Poetry / Something Stinks

You got it dead on and I’m so pleased.  I was starting to lose all hope but I think there’s some tweaking yet to be done as it’s theme is still very elusive to other readers.  

Thanks for you feedback and you read!

Go back and, with as new an eye as you can look at it, read your poem. Then read your reviews again. Who is being purposefully obtuse? Who is not even trying – just looking for an easy read?

Do NOT change your poem to make it simple, for simple minds. Poetry should not be simple, simply so that it is easily understood; sometimes it is good that veils peel back layer by layer as the reader moves through the poem. Sometimes it is nice that one thing is implied, while another is insinuated and the reader must decide for themselves which one They Prefer (you know, like in real life).

And as the creator of the poem in question, it is here in the Reply section that I take full pleasure in laying into the lazy or the hateful reviewers. They get no slack from me…unless their advice is worth taking. k

I’m sorry you couldn’t pick up how on each element of the power pole stunk in one way or another.  Maybe with some rethinking, I can bring out the suggestion a bit more without knocking it over other readers’ heads.

I really take it serious with these reviews.  I try so hard to see what the author is trying to portray.  I’d love to see it again if you tweak it just a bit…and if you don’t want to spend credits, email it to me…I’d love to review it again so I feel like I earned my credits fairly.

Thanks for the read.

No probs

No probs

No probs

I had, at one point, sectioned each sentence into separate stanzas but somehow convinced myself that it broke up the piece too much, being it’s so small.  

I’m not sure where this piece will end up by the end.  It might be incorporated into a big story line idea that I had.  I’m not sure yet.  

Thanks for the feedback and the read!

There is nothing wrong with small, lots of women are small, even lots of men, being large are very small minded, but cute.
Silence has a depth all of its own as well, be confident within your expression and care not for anothers presumed supposition.

This is definitely in an infancy stage.  It’s just kind of a fleeting idea that could still use some fleshing.  

Thanks for the read and your feedback.