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Poetry / If I ever forgot to say "Thank You"...
If I ever forgot to say “Thank You”...
If I ever…
Ever made you feel like less of a person, because of my ignorance or insensitivity.
Ever ignored you or took you for granted, because of being preoccupied.
Please understand
Understand that I am only ONE…
Only one man.
Only one thought at a time.
Only one…
Only one shoulder that can lean on me at a time,
Only one respite of sanctity, refuge, sanity.
For only one person at a time…
But nevertheless…
I try,
Try,
And try…
Some people are not even satisfied with that much.
They want to drain you dry- like a vampire and their prey.
I pull away at times because of these facts,
But nevertheless I try.
Try to do my best- and not leave myself empty.
To not be left with nothing else to give.
To give to others that need me.
Those that must share me, even if you want me all to yourself.
You must learn the same life lessons that I have learned, and that taught me to be the person that I am, today.
I know that we all need words of encouragement and words of wisdom to lift our soul.
And to all those that I forgot to thank along the way…
Thank You
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Teemmm reviewed Version 1 -
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zahir reviewed Version 1 -
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This is a beautiful thought, and I would love to see it expanded upon/cleaned up/tightened up.
Instead of asking for understand, rather in addition to asking for understanding, make an apology. That is far more important, more moving, more humble than an explanation.
A simple, “I’m sorry” in this piece would’ve brought me to tears.
Instead, I get the feeling of defensiveness, like you resent what others have asked of you, and if you really felt that way, you wouldn’t have written this.
Instead of accusations—“Some people are not even satisfied…”, put it on you. ”Sometimes I feel that people are trying to drain me…”
You are making a brave, honest attempt to tell people how much you appreciate them; it’s about how you feel. Let out more of how you do feel—what else do you have to apologize for? What specifically are you thankful for. Tell me more!!!!
Excellent beginning stages.
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jackknifethug reviewed Version 1 -
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jeez! how powerful was this one? evoking all the emotions one goes through at times when one feels they could have done so much more…
‘Understand that I am only ONE…
Only one man.
Only one thought at a time.
Only one…’
this is definately my favorite stanza, the was you left it hanging with the triple dot things. it reminds me of all the times i felt like others around me were being a little too demanding…
i LOVE this poem!!!
Bendo13 reviewed Version 1 -
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I like it.. some people really don’t look at other’s lives sometime and realize we’re not all perfect and sometimes there’s just so much going on that we forget, to say thank you or whatever. But, some may take offense to that, and think you did it purposely. When you spread yourself thin in any way, you can’t really be great in all areas, and sometimes it’s hard to focus on just a few select things.
onlywish reviewed Version 1 -
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This is just a great thing to write and to post and to say and to mean and just because it’s who you are. Shows a lot of emotion and respect for others. It also could be a great line of bull. Eather way you make an impression.Your writing is clear and concise an a joy to read.
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