Lyrics / 'Saint Kansas

Girl, you look so blown away, let’s leave this joint, take us a trip.
You’re making me a man with a mission, and baby I know that you’re hip.
Let me throw back this Jack, and get that warm glow in my guts.
You’ll like me better when I’m tighter than
the Tin Man’s rusted nuts.

Let’s leave the losers to their cowardly lyin’.
I know a witch who’s sweet.
She would melt in the pouring rain, and
she’s got the sugar we need.

Dorothy
you ain’t
in Kansas, anymore
Dorothy,
you know
‘saint Kansas, anymore?

I see you starin’ at the golden road. Think some wizard might take you home?
Yeah, that old man, he’s got some power, but he’s happy just living alone.
He pays me well to keep the lie alive, I’m the straw man who picks up his slack
Got my degree, it means nothing to me, until I get this monkey off my back.

Lets crush a rose in the poppy field
and talk about nature and god,
or the best planned lays of vi-ced men
and the dreams we lose when we nod

Dorothy
you ain’t
in Kansas, anymore
Dorothy
you know,
‘saint Kansas, anymore?

I’ll confess:
One January, I met a girl.
Couldn’t help but cut her a smile.
She fell for the Hollywood gamble,
that Bette, she was so in denial.
I took her home, showed her my etchings,
walked her through my private museum,
then I dropped her off on Norton, somewhere
between Three Nine and Coliseum.

Dorothy
you ain’t
in Kansas, anymore…

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cooljim102055 avatar General Stranger

April 06, 2008

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hi there,

very good..i love the way you use the wizard of oz in your lyric, and very nice touch..how about a title..”you ain’t, saint kansas ”...:) just a suggestion..nice job,,jim

Eris_Lost avatar General Stranger

April 04, 2008

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Well you definitely have experience with lyrics but with these I think you carry the Wizard of Oz reference’s a little too far. They become almost comically over the top and then seem to be almost completely dropped. Otherwise this piece has good rhythm and a solid chorus.

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December 31, 2006

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Fuckin’ Awesome man!  Right Alright!
Let me make it short and sweet, but do allow me to kiss yo ass fo dis one.  Very human, very real. Bueno.

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December 03, 2006

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never thought I could read a poem based on the Wiz of Oz I liked so much. Seems like you just got inspired and ran with it. It really worked. Put a interesting spin on the whole thing. “Lets crush a rose in the poppy field” is a good line I think, and the use of language, imagery, and references make it stand out

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