Poetry / Fearless
As I am gazing out the night
Only lifted by the full moon’s light,
I’m finally without the fear.
Nothing more can threaten me.
The mists are parting- I can see
That the Ocean is still and clear.
The Dawn’s arriving at my wish,
With a promise and a swish,
Of the brightest future that is so near.
This morning it brings tears to my eyes
To be able to watch the sunrise
At last without a trace of fear.
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I liked the flow of the poem, and enjoyed the rhyme scheme: it was very well done and not really that forced at all. I’m at a bit of a loss as to whether there is a figurative meaning to match its literal one. It reads like a poem about someone who is watching a sunrise without being afraid. I mean theoretically…
Sunrises are beginnings, so this could be about someone who is afraid of change, or new things. After getting through some sort of ordeal, during which the future was hazy (the mists), the narrator can now see far ahead and realize that everything is a-okay. The mention of the Ocean being still and clear made me think that some of the apprehension could have come from a violent ocean, or the worry of a storm, but I assumed that because ocean was capitalized, it was more of a philosophical ocean, rather than a real one.
Meh, who knows? You can comment here and let me know what you were going for, if you want. I always enjoy hearing the author’s intent.
You know, this poem also sort of reminded me of that song “I Can See Clearly Now.” Especially the part in the song that goes:
“I can see clearly now the rain is gone [the mist!]
I can see all obstacles in my way [the ocean?]
gone are the dark clouds that had me blind [the mist again!]
It’s going to be a bright, sun-shiny day.[the sunrise!]”
Yup, nice poem.
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Really positive poem, it provokes good feelings and hope.
Good imagery-
Personally, I like your rhyming words.
4th stanza—(This morning, it…)
i really enjoyed this. i felt your rhyme scheme was extremely well done and i liked the use of punctuation. i felt this was over all well done.
I’m hoping I have this correct..
As I am gazing out the night
Only lifted by the full moon’s light,
I’m finally without the fear.
This morning it brings tears to my eyes
To be able to watch the sunrise
At last without a trace of fear.
This is a great vampire poem! if it’s not intended,(which it seems it is) then I found the rock you stumbled upon.
Regardless, the flow is very smooth and after finishing, begs to be reread.
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