Poetry / Snow Is So Romatic

A good idea, a tight form and a great twist at the end.

Some of the lines dont quite work, particularly: “Warm feelings in the heart” it doesnt seem to fit.

There’s a discreppency between the I and the Us in lines 5 and 6 – should be we and us??

Im also not sure if you are trying for rhymes or not it feels a little bit in between at the moment with some strong end-rhymes and other partial ones.

Well worth editing – could be very good.

I like this poem alot .it seemed very heartfelt and stirred emotions in me so all in all I thought it was good .
Could have been longer though ..Was just getting into the beautiful comparison and it was over…

great! i like the snow alot more now your poetry is full of emotion it flowed like liquid. only thing i can say negative is one line is missing something…”I need her touch to comfort
Caress to keep us warm” something more should be there maybe like
i need her touch to comfort. her carress to us warm. just a thought though  good job.

The repitition of “snow is so romantic” reminds the reader of the theme of this poem, and the sound of that line is very lovely. But the images, similies, and methphors that show why snow is romantic are rather weak.
Overall, this poem was too cutesy and sentimential for my tastes; but some people enjoy that, it’s a good start.
Cheers,
A.J.W

I really liked this because you ddn’t use way too many details but you explained your point well. Love and snow are both distant from here

Love the sentiment and how true, reasonably well written, though i think its a bit clipped in a couple of places, Try on line 2 Exciting everybody leaving. then onto the next line, Caress to keep us warm, try A caress, Then try hugging/cuddling in each others arms. the last four lines are very good.

this isn’t exactly my style, hence the average rating, but I could see it attracting an audience nonetheless. I tripped at the Caress line and would suggest adding a “Her” before caress and maybe changing “us” to “me” I think this would work better with the line before it.

I love snow, and I really liked this poem.  I’d have to agree that snow is definitely romantic, and I especially loved how you compared snow and love in a very unique way.  Very good job.  I would never have thought to relate snow and love through both fading or “melting” over time.

This short piece doesn’t start to roll til after the 3rd line.  Then it flows into a nice piece but lines 2 and 3 are off in imagery. Darkness can’t help snow to glisten, maybe morning does, then the 3 line exciting everybody is soo generic.  The rest flows well with imagery and has a nice romantic ring, like silver bells.  I love the line that love melts like snow imagery, felt that one.  The beginning needs work to pull the whole thing together.  

You know what’s corny?  The title and the last line.  It’s just fucking corny.  But the stuff in between the enormously rotten apples isn’t that bad – just spoiled.

G.T. Roe