Poetry / Out of the sky

Out of the sky
love has fallen
landing on a green covered meadow
the grass bends and sways to accommodate
love is heavy and awkward
love is warm and gentle
love is amusing and joyful

love must return to the sky it has fallen from
the grass bends and sways to argue
love does not want to leave but it does not belong here
love is true and honest
love is good and righteous
love is beautiful and kind

the grass bends and sways to accommodate
back to the sky
love has risen  

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September 05, 2007

NyxLoVe

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NyxLoVe reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Its a bit awkward, but sweet. Look at the lines, move and rephrase to improve the flow of the piece. But as always, my remarks are only sugestions. :)

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