Journalism / I want to be Shakespeare.

This is very well written. I like how you lay it out in such a way as to describe who you want to be. I actually think this would make a nice beginning, or a prologue in a book of some sort. It’s very good, I’d like to read more like this.

Doesn’t everyone nowadays want to be Shakesphere?

lol, just playing.  This is really nicely put.  You wanted to be someone in the beginning, and as your more ‘picky’ wants grow throughout the paragraphs, you end up knowing who you want to be.  

That’s cool beans to me.

-SF

Not exactly journalism.  More like a personal blog entry really.  I’d say it even reads a little like a poem.  You might consider playing with the words and tightening this up to be a poem. I think that might work very well.  You clearly have a way with words.

The sentiment is simple and I don’t think you needed to use so many words to portray it.

Just a thought – and I don’t mean this in a harsh way, I’m just trying to encourage you to clarify something – but do you actually have anything to say, or do you just want to be famous for saying it?  

If it is the case that you simply want fame for fame’s sake, I think an interesting question to ask is: why?  Maybe that could be the topic of your next piece.

You missed the word “be” between “to” and “important”.

This isn’t really journalism as much as it is a blog.

Anyways, you get really repetitive in this piece.  You over emphasize that you want to be great, instead of saying the same message through different words each time.  

In the first paragraph you start off saying that you want your masterpiece and legacy to be in the writing category, however, you later on mention that it could be a film or “whatever”.  If you don’t want your masterpiece to be just restricted into the category of writing, I’d recommend changing the first paragraph a bit so the reader doesn’t get the idea that the work of art you leave behind must be a piece of writing.

On a side note, it sounds like you want fame more than skill. “But I want to be known in my own time; I don’t want to be Emily Dickinson or Vincent Van Gogh. ”  And I can tell you, although fame can be motivator to achieve great skill, you’re not gonna reach the fame you want unless if you pursue skill over fame.

I think youve written the thoughts of a hell of a lot of people here, in 230 words. Thats quite a gift. Well done, I enjoyed the honesty in this.

I think, deep down, even if we don’t care to admit it, many people, myself included, certainly, would be able to relate to the feelings you have described in this peice.

Although many of us write because we enjoy it and get a sense of achievement, or creativity and ordering of thoughts, each of us no doubt feel a desire for success, and not the self-affacing kind that would be humbling and appropriate to own. To have our skill acknowledged is surely a human trait not to be disgraced in.

It is well written, concise, and to the point. there is no long flowerly prose trying to do justice to shakespeare or compete with him. you write plainly and bluntly with good word choices and a little name dropping that doesn;t hurt – on the contrary it shows you are well read and have a keen sense of history, of time and place and some knowledge of famous persons to whom you allude.

well done