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Poetry / IN OUR PRIME, IS THAT A CRIME???
Staying out
drinking wine.
Pumping music
lets take a line.
Nothing mattered.
When we were in our prime.
Was that a crime??
It started friday
around about six.
Baby sitters sorted
we drop off our kids.
See you later
the chosen phrase.
Little did our mums know
they wouldn’t see us for days.
Nothing mattered.
When we were in our prime.
Was that a crime??
The butterflies
in our stomaches
kept on growing.
Our fuelled horizons,
no red lights
no slowing.
No sign,
when will it end
nobody knew and
nobody cared.
We didnt care.
We were growing.
In our prime.
Was that a crime??
The weekends
we shared,
Our clothes,
we shared.
Our money,
we shared.
Our blokes.
We spared.
The blokes I speak of
are geezer gay mates.
Still dawn and night, dancing
up till late.
Fusion fashion,
hoping that
my heels are still stuck on
Handbag frenzy,
search fit.
then I,
cry, I’m,
sitting on it.
A sigh of relief,
is heared,
no finger pointing,
no thief.
Lying
Taxi wait,
babysitter,
home late,
I will pay through the nose.
The jester jones,
never knows.
When its time to go home.
Still feel like I’m in my prime.
Like to go out late.
Pay babysitters
for sleeping,
now theres a crime.
BUT I DON’T GET THE COMEDOWN,
I ALWAYS SHINE.
Because I’M in prime,
is that a crime????
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TomBL3 reviewed Version 5 -
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I remember my sisters leaving us with the kids, I was the babysitter, I suppose you were too, thats what happens you join the cycle dont you!! I like the bit about the handbag, I still do this all the time, not with my handbag of course buy my mobile phone.
You know what, its funny, because I feel like I am in my prime now even though I am knocking on a bit (not too much!!)
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WilloWisp1212 reviewed Version 5 -
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Hey this was fun! I really liked it. There was some wording I didn’t get but I tend to be pretty thick headed so i’m sure its not you. Maybe i need to learn some new lingo. Anyhoo, I think my favorite part was
“The butterflies
in our stomaches
kept on growing.
Our fuelled horizons,
no red lights
no slowing….”
I remember this when I was younger. I’ve gotten boring now. The rythm was kind of fun and frenzied just like a young person that doesn’t care feels. Nice reflection. L
imjustme reviewed Version 5 -
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This is good, but sometimes it rhymed and sometimes it was just everywhere, if you know what I mean. I like the line “I cry, I’m sitting on it!” because it added some humor to it. Good job
LostAspirations reviewed Version 1 -
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Reminds me of a couple weekends i’ve spent just dicking around. I could almost feel the wind blowing through my hair with the window rolled down as we cruised down the road headed for no place in particular. Reminds me of the good times when nothing mattered except having a good time.
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