Poetry / brent

ego (as in the part of us that gives us uniqueness and produces emotion).... that was the shattered ego. We hold on to these things because they feed our emotions and we can become addicted to the emotions that we feed :)

thank you…. by the way you understand “ego” as my sense of self that will be shattered, yes?
i appreciate your review and thoughts :)
namaste

thank you for your review, i am glad you enjoyed it :)
namaste
b

yes it is about the death of a friend, thank you :)

it’s should be its…was the correction…but i think poetry should have room for some different treatments :)
thanks for your review.

It’s not advice at all. It’s an elegy. It serves purely to reflect on the death of a friend and how I view it.

thanks for the heads up on its.

Oh I see but how does that tie with into the “shattered ego”? That an several other lines seem to make this poem seem more like someone who has gone through a series or unfortunate events (for give the lemony skickit) and is optimistic that things will improve. I don’t think titling it after the person who died (assuming so and sorry for the loss) is enough.

shattered ego is referring to who is hurt in the event of one who dies. It is my ego or sense of self that is shattered because I won’t be able to have the exchange that I did with my friend. The one that has deceased is gone and the pain is left for the living. Ego is not meant as the the inflated form of self but rather
”  In psychoanalysis, the division of the psyche that is conscious, most immediately controls thought and behavior, and is most in touch with external reality”.

That’s interesting. I promise though that nobody’s gonna read ego in the context you want it to be read. The colloquial definition of ego is too wide spread. For example, the word faggot has too meanings too – actually more. If I wrote a line that said, “I’m going out to collect faggots to burn in the fire” – who would interpret that to literally mean going out to get branches to burn? It’s about context.

depends on the circles you play in babe :) my major was psych, theater and I am a minister and artist…most of my crew know what i am saying. If i write a elegy for a friend and share it…. it really doesn’t concern me to make it fit for all to understand…those that will… will, those that don’t but want to…. will ask, those who don’t and don’t give a damn… go along their way. It is what it is. No one can write for all people, nor should they try. Look at the bible, it is supposed to be “the written word of god” and it has spawned so many different sects based on words, meaning is lost due to the nitpicking of words. I know the definitions of faggot and it would be the “context” that would give me a clue as to what the writer is trying to convey. Of course “I’m going to smoke a fag” could have two meanings and it’s a 50/50. I just read a haiku that was about the writer’s donkey but made perfect sense also describing a star when it novas….my point… yes, i have one….is you can’t “promise that NOBODY’S going to read ego” as I do, you can only speak for yourself. All in all I hope this has been a fun little banter and have a great day :)
Namaste
(defined:    
* The Spirit in me meets the same Spirit in you.
    * I greet that place where you and I are one.
    * I salute the Light of God in you.
    * I bow to the divine in you.
    * I recognize that within each of us is a place where Divinity dwells, and when we are in that place, we are One.
    * My higher energy salutes your higher energy.
    * The God in me sees and honors the God in you.
    * May the God within you, bless you
    * The Divine within me sees and honors the Divine within you.)

barbee

it was from a death of a friend
a new moment
a new purpose are to represent singular events for another person at another time

yes, i had just found out of a friend’s death and had to reflect on what that meant to me…somewhat of a elegy

it is meant as an elegy for a friend upon who’s death I learned of. I must grieve for my shattered ego was to communicate that it is the living, our ego (sense of self) that will be sad that we won’t be able to see them again. it really needs to stay as one :) thank you for your thoughts and review