Poetry / Sister At Arms

Im all for feminism and the voice is quite clear in this poem, however, and i think you’ll agree, many people still believe that woman are not suppressed in this day in age. As if sexsism is just a myth while i believe is still a fact.
So, through your poem i would like for you to give a specific example of how women are suppresed.

For example, why not allude to something contemporary. Some event that happen in pop culture or in the media that explains how woman are still suppresed. That way the reader can contemplate of how women are still suppresed by men.

Reminds me of the Suffragettes who agitated for women’s women’s right to vote in the early 20C. The women of one the city states of Ancient Greece go their men to stop behaving badly by making a pact to refusing their conjugal rights. It worked. They stopped going to war.

Well, I can certainly feel a strong set of beliefs in this, but I have trouble identifying because it feels like a sermon, and one that’s not directed at me.  I guess maybe if i were the right audience, I would feel different, but I think this would be stronger if you took these ideas and wove them into a story of sorts, or gave me examples of what you’re talking about, because right now it’s all generalization, which gives me nothing to hold on to.  Don’t preach at me, show me what you’re talking about and make me feel what you feel.

A very influential poem, it gives me the impression that you want other women to read this.
And I like the title ‘Sister at Arms’ a great play on the words “Brothers at Arms”.

It is quite a dark poem, and gives me the image of women congregating to appeal for their rights. This of course is probably true, and i ask where you got the inspiration for this poem from?

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January 10, 2007

by Devaki

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I have a very old friend and she’s very much into female empowerment.  In fact, part of the basis for our friendship is that we are both strong women who embrace our desires and our ambitions.  Last year, my fiance and I had our first child.  She was angry at me for having a kid because it was the “typical” woman thing to do.  I don’t believe that women have to give up being women to be powerful and that’s the message I was trying to get across here.

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as a poem i wasnt too sure whether it flowed as well as it could have- but the subject and the language was very well done indeed. i loved the last stanza, the power in the voice as they stood up as a woman in their own right, rather than a woman made to fit into a mans shoe.

i very much enjoyed reading this. it has a very powerful statement of a woman that is sure of who she is and how she got there. inspiring.

I loved the tone of this poem. She refuses to put into a mold, and even steps out of the shadows of feminists before her by speaking out in ways they would have never imagined in their day. I loved this verse.

Sister at Arms
You offer up your unconceived children
On the altar of pseudo-equality
And seduce women to prove
That we’re just as good as men
Looking over your shoulder
At the feminist icons of our past
To watch them roll over in their graves

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December 19, 2006

by Devaki

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Thanks for the review.  This piece is a little out of my normal realm of theme and style so I’m still a little unsure of it.  Always nice to get some positive reinforcement

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