No my writing is not all like this. It was the spear of the moment thing; were your just so annoyed that you rush throw it all and just want to get all your thoughts out.
I’m sure you’d understand
Criticism / theres some Criticism for ya
so yer….i started with Urbis thing a wee while ago…and yer it startd off all good….but theres a few things that are total lame…..
first i think the points one is a bit lame’o….but fair enuf coz its the only way to make ppl read other stuff but still…..
and then i’ve had my stuff up on this freak for agez and i havnt even had ne activity!
i like writing action fantasy…but man do i need some work on my writing….I’ve done so many stories but yet never finishd ne…..LOZER!
i come up with these awesome ideas and then i just? i just lose the momentum…pisses me off real bad…..
so all i’m saying is this thing sucks!!
kinda?
well yer…
i would be happy if ppl wer reading them….and what they think of the story itself not the technical part….coz cum’on ppl…..thats not all we want to hear….we would like to kno if you think the story line or idea is cool….coz what if its really well written but a total lame ass story….or the other way around…..can’t write as good…but a mint story if it was fixed up….
either way….
flag the “helpful criticism” for awhile and just try the fact or what you think of the story….like you do with books….
so yer…
thought i’d get that happy thought off my chest…hahaha
coughcough
theres some Criticism for ya….and dont come telling me its not in the right category!
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Well, I see you have a lot of time on your hands. Maybe reading a dictionary will take up some of your extra time.
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momsgirl2 reviewed Version 1 -
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Reviews are suppose to critique the material and the reader to give their response to the work and also to add a different slant you might have used. I am published but still find I am learnig things on here by people that sometimes get my goat but after thinking about it I can see where their views came from..Try reviewing some yourself and see it isn’t always easy to review a piece,
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You’re writing is probably full of amazing ideas – hmmm – but it’s really difficult to read because it’s all text language. I have to say I’m guilty of typos too – but reading your writing here was painful. Is all your writing like this? You probably have great ideas but I’m not suprised you’ve not had many reviews. What I’m trying to say is give your work more of a chance by allowing people in – that’s what the technical side is there for.
berzerkkenobi reviewed Version 1 -
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You should read my poem Frugal Bastard!
izzy421096 reviewed Version 1 -
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I can totally feel this. Mean ppl suck yellow snow. I’ve taken a look at what you’ve written. good stuff. I wish that there was some other way to get ppl to review without the points system. But until someone thinks of something better. This is it.
Wytchcat reviewed Version 1 -
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I have to give this a neutral because I am not sure if it is sarcasm personified or real.
If it is real it is like walking around the corner of your apt building to find some profane but truthful grafitti ranting about the government sprayed on your apt door.
Which means… I kinda like it actually
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