The song is about the people being such good friends that he wants to become lovers. You are thinking that they are already together and thats why the bridge is confusing to you.
Lyrics / Keep On
Verse 1
Here it goes again no chapter to begin,
and I’m curious,
How all this will turn out.
And all this pain ensues my thoughts,
When I think a lot,
About how beautiful she is and how I could have made her happier.
Selfishness could have,
Been a motivator for all this,
But all I wanted was to share a television dream.
A perfect home.
A Perfect love to call my own.
If only she’d pursue her dreams.
Chorus
I’m sick of this crying.
Should I keep on trying to love her more?
Tear upside down my whole life?
To show that it’s her that I’m fighting for.
Should I move from this place?
Show her these tears running down this face.
And tell her that I’d give everything,
Just to have her heart.
Verse 2
And all I ask,
Give me one chance to prove that I am,
The one you need, the one to compliment your dreams.
I promise I’ll last.
Just take my hand forget the past.
There is so much we have to see.
Chorus
I’m sick of this crying.
Should I keep on trying to love her more?
Tear upside down my whole life?
To show that it’s her that I’m fighting for.
Should I move from this place?
Show her these tears running down this face.
And tell her that I’d give everything,
Just to have her heart.
Bridge
No more friends,
But lovers and not the thought of it,
Cause it hurts to much.
And if you don’t say “Yes.”,
Then I’ll always be forever crushed,
And broken.
So please save me from this,
This unhappiness.
This unhappiness.
Alternate Chorus
I’m done with this crying.
And I’ll keep on trying to love her more.
I’ll tear upside down my whole life.
To show that it’s her that I’m fighting for.
And I’ll move from this place.
Show her these tears running down this face.
And tell her that I’d give everything,
Just to have her heart.
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Fallstar reviewed Version 1 -
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I like those lyrics. They fit well with the rhythm I imagined in my head, and the lines’ length is good and varied without sounding bad. You’ve kept to a good rough sequence with the line lengths. And adding in a bridge and the ending Chorus is good.
One minor thing, which is the second verse. You should try to keep the verses the same length. Otherwise, good lyrics. I can easily imagine them being sung to a song.
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MaggieMinardi reviewed Version 1 -
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Without hearing the music, it’s tough to say if you’ll get your goal. But if you’ve got the guts to put it out here, you’ll probably perform. The music will make or break this song. Will it be a soft ballad or are you going to give it an edge? Personally, go with a little edge, but that’s a jaded old girl.
I know what you’re saying and I think the words are great.
The Bridge lost me a bit in the first three lines. If you’re good lovers, you’ve got to still be friends; how you get that across is up to you.
Not the thought of it cause it hurts too much? I don’t get it.
This is a universal pain and you hear it well.
LeAnn reviewed Version 1 -
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I think this would make a great song. Great flow, could be a little easier reading. I have been told by a few musicians that songs should flow easily as if you were speaking to someone. I wish you lots of luck. Good lyrics. Gool Luck.
unspokensecrets reviewed Version 1 -
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I thought that these lyrics were very good. I don’t know if you wanted the rhyme scheme to remain constant throughout the entire piece or not but I thought I would just mention that it wavers a little bit. However, I think that even though it wavers it still sounds really really good. It makes sense and it came from the heart and actually, sometimes things are sweeter if they are just flat out said without trying to rhyme them with similar words. Sometimes when we do that things just get too confusing.
Anyway, enough of my rambling.
Nice work.
I can’t find anything significantly wrong that I could give you constructive criticism on.
Keep writing and keep submitting.
January 21, 2007
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I like it. I love how it goes together. It also sounds like it will have a nice beat or rythm.
aprilsmiles reviewed Version 1 -
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V2 is my absolute favorite. It has something there that I believe everyone who has been in love with someone they can’t/don’t have, or someone who has been hurt badly can relate to. Good Job.
princess_tommy reviewed Version 1 -
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That was beautiful. I think that is going to be one of those great love songs one day. The feeling that are expressed are clearly showed. And that’s, like, uber good. This would probably go really good with maybe a slow ish rythem. This is really good. Good luck!
IAmThatHero reviewed Version 1 -
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Wow, this is very powerful! i fet like i was right there with you through this stuff, and possibly it is because i have dealt with the exact same thing in my life. It is relly good because of that fact: people can relate to it.
As a songwriter myself, i have learned that it is these types of songs that people dub “my” song… because it means so much to them, and it is very specific about what it is talking about, yet general enough to apply to anyone who has faced this dilemna before.
Good job brother, keep up the good songwriting! i only wish i coud hear this to music, ‘cause i know that the music would make it so much more powerful!
yang reviewed Version 1 -
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i liked the meaning. it really does bring out that emotion that the reader wants to feel from reading it. i can sort of put a pattern in my head that it could be sung to, but the only problem with reading lyrics rather than poems is that poems usually have a constant pattern while lyrics move with the singers tone and creative touch. i can see this easily making a good rock song (sorry if you dont want to perform under that genre). it was overall good, the chorus was great but the verses, in my opinion seemed to cover the point and bring out the emotions, but not as strongly as the chorus did. thanks though, i enjoyed reading this.
BFTD540 reviewed Version 1 -
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I like lyrics that go somewhere and this does just that. I don’t know what kind of music you’re into but it rings of “Robert Bradley and the Black water Surprise”. It’s contemporary blues. I like it and with very little trimming it could be one of his songs. That’s not to say it isn’t original. Love songs are a hard sell today in any genre (except maybe country) Good stuff, keep going…Neil…AKA…Neil
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