Action Adventure / The Prince Of Pistoleers: Protected, Chapter 1

I will only say that there is some work still needed on structure, but you specified no grammar and spelling, so I’ll move on.

I imagine you have watched Clint Eastwood movies, such as the Good, The Bad, And the Ugly, A Fist Full of Dollars, and For A Few Dollars More directed by Sergio Leone.  I think modeling a main character upon Eastwood’s The Man With No Name persona is a good idea.  Beyond this, you have a good back story to work with, but it has been overused in the past.  I recommend you might search for alternative reasons for him to be a drifter.  Maybe he is just back from the war or killed his brother over a woman they both loved.  You may also find some good ideas in Louis Lamour’s books.  Even though, its not a Western, Lamour’s ‘The Walking Drum’ is set in Medieval Europe and is really exciting reading.  Hank has some promise as a character, but find some more suitable back story for the poor guy!  Keep up the good work.

There wasn’t much dialogue, just him talking to his horse.

The story has potential, but there isn’t really enough at this point for me to make much of a judgement.

You have the beginnings of a story, too early to give a proper critique.

I didn’t like ‘it seemed the snow came early’ when you tell us next the snow is on the ground.

Its a shame he can’t vindicate himself for this so called murder. Maybe the only witness left town and he is trying to find him/her.

I wish you all the best and look forward to reading more of this.