Poetry / Little Cigars
Sweet smelling aromas
you’re artificial
You believed every word he said
About those tubes being healthy.
There’s no toilet bowl cleaner in these
You would always say that
They taste better too
Because you cant make a nuclear bomb out of em’
Well they look the same bud,
They got the same filter
The crap on the inside
still looks the same too.
same old crap.
Are they addictive?
No, not if you don’t smoke
too many
Well, you’ve smoked four
in the past five
hours.
So who told you that,
these little brown rolls
weren’t as bad as
the white ones
that everyone else
smokes so passionately?
A liar.
You need to log in to urbis or create an urbis account to review this writing.
Reviews
Sort Reviews by Newest | Oldest | Highest Quality | Lowest Quality | Newest Comments |
This 79 word review has not been unlocked.
This made me laugh..I like it and the story behind it,,Nice job of expressing yourself..
- add/view comments (0)
maybe actaully mention cigars within them. At the end. i like it. shows your emotion well. nice alliteration at the begining.
January 08, 2007
Deleted User
another 17 year old who has made me feel a tad bit inadequate as a writer with their words. you did mocking cigars justice. the emotion within each line is packed whole-heartedly and the poem screams honesty. i’m glad i read this and i am looking forward to reading more. nods
I enjoyed the straightforward and candid style you used here. It flows well for the most part. It begins with a slightly enigmatic feeling; your indirect beginning works well. The sarcasm is an effective statement about addiction and I enjoyed it, perhaps because I relate.
However, I would say that this piece could stand a little bit of complexifying. It doesn’t need much. But more layers of meaning would help—you could, for example, further explore the meaning of addiction.
Overall, keep writing!
Showing 1 - 5 of 5
Review item
Add to faves
GENERAL
REVIEW QUEUE
Ratings & Rankings
