Poetry / Miss miss!

mm. goosebumples my little green man. i think that this is marvelous: “Miss miss!
Mister miss!
the next time that you
decide to teach on literature
read us stories
and throw away the math.”
its so you and that is beautiful.  i love to read you. you know?  i love to read you. and i think the concept of skin out living a professors mind is brilliant.  keep writing chase.  there is purpose, well at least i think there is.

I like the idea that you are trying to convey…but without your note to the reviewer, the intent is lost. I think you may want to switch the 1st and 2nd stanzas around. Then you set the reader up from the outset with the emotional bearing of the piece. I like lean poetry, but this needs some more meat. Build it up more to create solid visual and emotional connection points for the reader, and then, if you need to trim the fat, go ahead.

take out the “letter, grades….” in the second stanza.  Just end it at ”...throw notes…”

i like it.  are you trying to say at the end that puncuation is like math?  that would be cool.  anywho.  GOOD!  nice use of an exclamation point, also.

i’ve often wanted to say this to a number of my professors while in college:

“the next time that you
decide to teach on poetry
write the words
and not the rules.”

and it does my eyes, heart, and mind good to see it written. all of the dos and don’ts when writing killed me. i just wanted to be lead, taught without being hindered, acknowleged without feeling inadequate; most times this was not the case. i like the repetition of the lines, “Miss miss! Mister miss!” it shows a sense of importance. again, you’ve left me in a crazy state of awe and i definitely appreciate it.