Poetry / Writing plight
A letter sent ink split from seperate ends the pen has spent days hovering almost giving in to the temptation of the writer’s least important friend, reality and the blocks it forms..
Indecisive is an understatement when faced with empty parchment with which to fill with words, sometimes he scribbles and tears it to pieces just to say he got something done..
Where do you go and what do you do when you get to the place in your head?
Better is a word that describes all his works, with a could be in front of it and a snicker to end, But he thinks, “When they talk, it’s to hear themselves, They’re far too cold for my words to sink in”.
Streetlights whisper and visions walked through, he walks to bridges and sights where he kneels and wishes for something new, this is just too beautiful for his amateur view.
Traveling swell smells of lemon candles and warm nights..
He fights it but lights it and finally finds every word every phrase every line from the play the he had surely forgotten along with some other memories that fell victim to loss over his travels.
In this moment he falls in a thought not too far to die but far enough to never be the same, he strains while wrapping this thought in a word, a phrase, some way to communicate, he fails and sits in the garbage and laughs, this is the writer in all of his glory, what he writes may not be the best written story, but it was gold before it left his hands.
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I know the feeling. I have so many great ideas, and they seem to dissipate before I can get them on paper. You’ve got a good start with this though. The lemon candles imagery. It’s pretty. I would wherever possible, don’t use beautiful as a descriptor. Frost said you should use it just 5 times in your entire career. There’s better adjectives.
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I thought this was a well-communicated piece regarding its message. I feel like there’s punctuation or something missing from the first stanza though—somehow it just doesn’t seem to flow. I’d also add a hyphen between “could be” in stanza four. The rest of the poem flows quite well =)
I really love this poem. Your writing style is wondefully fluent. The points of rhyme really enhanced the sense of rhythm that encompasses the piece. Internal rhyme is a powerful tool, and you utilise it extremely well. Keep up the wonderful work.
Hilarious, and all too familiar.
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