Poetry / Invisible Wounds

Don’t underestimate me
You’ll get a few surprises
There’ll be no backing down
And there will be no compromises
I won’t be talked down to
Or walked on anymore
It’s my time to scream
And I won’t be ignored
The wounds you’ve inflicted
Are most certainly real
Deep and disturbing
Wounds that time cannot heal
I’m my own person
Make no mistake
You cannot defeat me
My pride you can’t take
I can’t let you go on
To do this again
And to hurt someone else
I will put this to an end
You can’t stop this
Once it begins
You’ve started a battle
That you can never win
You’ll be the one to cry
On hands and knees you’ll crawl
And you’ll see, in the end
You’ll be the one to fall
So say your goodbyes
This is your last night
I will finally take you down
And I will finally win this fight
No longer will I sit and cry
Alone in the dark
Because of the wounds you’ve inflicted
Without leaving a visible mark.

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January 24, 2007

ProfessorKelly

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ProfessorKelly reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Employing stanzas will make this easier to read.
Remember the golden rule of writing - ”Show and not tell”.
You’re telling a lot but not showing the reader or audience anything.
This is more of cliche filled monologue than a poem.