Poetry / The Essence of a Rainbow

I love the colors in this piece!  It gives such depth and feeling.  It has a softness about it and reads smoothly.  I can think of no better was to say it.  I think there is nothing I would change.
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Wow.  I thought this was very beautiful and the rhymes managed to fit the flow nicely without sounding forced or childish.  I like the comparison between a woman and a rainbow, as well as the fact that both friendship and love were included.

I hope you let Alex see the reviews. ;)

This is a nice love poem, describing love in colors and how they would be seen by the writer. The rhyme scheme has to go, however. It takes all the uniqueness away from the poem and kind of “commercializes it. If this were written without rhyming it really has potential.

a true friend to write such words , they must have been , they do remind me of a shakespear verse like the one’s out of mid summer nights dream , what thou sees when thoe dust wake , it seems to be writen with such carefull intent as them verses and in that way with beauty in mind , thankyou for posting this and leting me and people enjoy it,you are very lucky to have a friend of such,,

i like it.  your friend has wonderful imagery and a great rhythm.

i liked the subject matter, the way you decribed eatch color and what it meant to you, and how you described them.

So cheerful and really romantic.  The only thing that didn’t make sence to me was the last line in “blue” and “Yellow” They each felt off rythym.  But it is good, so discriptive, and easy to read.

It’s always a risky situation when you begin to write in an “aaaa/bbbb” style format, and I think this poem would’ve done a lot better in an “aabb/ccdd” style format. To be quite frank the similes and metaphors were pretty basic, predictable and corny. The level of writing was on a more juvenile level, but good plan for the layout and basic scheme.

Its cute.  However when you mention red, you say a lot of things about white.  Like the snow and the white glove. And I thought red would resemble more of the passion.  But that is just me.  I like how you have the pot of gold at the end, clever.  This is a fun poem, just watch out for forced rhyming…

i must confess i am a person with a soft spot for rhythm, rhyme and sweetness in a poem, a thing i am often critiqued badly for. tell this poet that they have a very good sense of meter for most of it. (the first line should be split into two). try leaving out the word “may” in the ‘yellow’ verse, it’s just one syllable too long. their rhymes do not feel forced, which is a difficult task at times. i would like to see the verse of ‘red’ reworked, however, it doesn’t follow the rest of the poem in form and trips up the pleasant flow they had going. all in all a delightful read and i am going to show it to my best friend who collects rainbows.