c. T.Newell, 2003
verse one
I bet you never had a genuine problem,
I bet you never thought it was uncommon
To be living in perpetual comfort and style
and i wonder if you ever took a moment
To comprehend the genuine componets of your lifestyle
are you sleeping as much as you should
and I
want just one minute of your time
so I can try to explain my point of view to you
I’ll do my best to help you understand the way I do
verse two
Well I bet you never had to wait for nothing
I could not imagine I could see you wanting
Or without all of the luxuries in life
And I could understand you getting overtired
When making all those very difficult choices
Should I have red or white, camembert or brie?
And I
want just one day out of your life
So I can try to regain my sense of humour
To walk just one mile in your shoes
One day to
verse three
Live the life that everyone desires where
Nothing difficult becomes a trial
It’s so easy to be temted by several degrees
I wonder would you ever take the time to
Bother walk even a mile in my shoes
Where there’s no one
Cooking breakfast or making your bed
bridge
Would you? Cause I bet you’ve never had a genuine complaint before my friend
Would you, would you, ever bother, I don’t think so my friend…
instrumental
verse four
I bet you never had a genuine problem,
I bet you never thought it was uncommon
To be living in perpetual comfort and style
and i wonder if you ever took a moment
To comprehend the genuine componets of your lifestyle
are you sleeping as much as you should
(Fade out)
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February 04, 2007
Really liked the lyrics, but, as with all “songs” it is very hard to really appreciate the overall qualitites without the music. I have seen a lot of well written songs that just didnt work musically, and the radio is filled with catchy music that have wretched lyrics…. I’m a survivor by Destiny’s Child comes to mind. That being said I really liked it and hope the music is as good as the lyrics. Good Luck
I swear, it would be better if Urbis could load a music player on here so we could HEAR the lyrics, not just read the print and make up a tune in our heads!! lol. I really do think that would be better.
And this is a good piece. I like the words and you have a very good use of grammar, big words always make a song better. lol. Maybe it’s just me =) I don’t know. I don’t really care. I like a song if it has good lyrics, and I would deffinatly listen to this song/buy this CD. =)
HOPE I HELPED!!!!
~*Renea
I like this a lot. I’m not a singer, but by just looking at the lyrics, I can imagine the words being sung by someone. It seems like it has a nice flow to it, and I like the overall topic of the piece. It’s very true how we take things for granted, especially those who are very well off and have never lived a day in their life without a maid or someone to do everything for them. I hope you attract an agent/publisher, because this definitely deserves to be heard. Good luck and nice job.
I like this a lot. It’s simple enough to be a song, but not so simple that it can’t be poetry, too. You did a good job using slant rhymes, like “moments” and “components” (check the 5th line – there are 2 Ns in “components”). I think those work in music because they keep the listener guessing.
Nitpicky things that are important if you want to submit this professionally:
-In the third to last line, i should be I.
-I would put a question mark at the end.
Good luck with this!
To comprehend the genuine componets of your lifestyle
are you sleeping as much as you should.
My favorite part. I like this. I can hear this playing on the radio. Good luck!
I liked the song, well structured and I’m sure it would flow nicely if sung accompanied by a piano or acoustic guitar.
I live in Bristol, in the UK and I work with alot of different music artists, because I started an entertainment company here when I was fifteen.
Three years on I’ve left the company to the other two directors and I’m no working with alot of different acoustic artists. Most of them are young people between the ages of seventeen to twenty five and most have struggled in school or work, but have exceptional talent for music.
I’m telling you this because if you would like any of my acts to perform one of your songs we’d be happy to, you can keep the rights to it, we’d just perform it for the love of music.
Message me back if your interested in that.
If not then the song is really good, and if you want as agent I suggest you arrange a Portfolio of your songwriting and other various creative material. Get all your past achievements in order with that, record a few of the songs, and then send out the recorded versions and lyrics to as many different agents and Music labels as possible but with “COPYRIGHT” stamped all over the suckers.
Anyhow, Good luck to you.
Pretty good. I like the theme of stepping in anothers footsteps to try to experience other thoughts and emotions. The fortunate sometimes do not give a moment of their time to others, nor stop to look back at themselves to try and see who they really are and what makes them up. Waiting for nothing is a VERY strong image. Cheerio!
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