Lyrics / My Woman

The first line and I had “Folsom Prison Blues” tune in my head!  The first line!  haha  Then as I read it got stronger.  I laughed.  I smiled.  I loved it!  It is writing like this that makes my morning a ittle happier.  Thanks!

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November 10, 2005

by Deleted User

You know, that song should be recorded.  I really do like it.  It is a fun song for me.

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I like your subject matter here and it has many good moments. But I feel like you loose your momentum in the last two stanza’s, and I think its the detail you injected into the first two that I miss.

I don’t think there’s anything wrong at all with taking someone else’s tune and writing a song to it.  I’m not particularly educated on Cash so I wouldn’t know how similar this really is to a song of his, but even then, if it’s casual, there’s nothing wrong with it.

I’ll be honest though, before I even read the description on the side (which was halfway through reading the song) I got the feeling this song had an old-fashioned rock-country, or even bluegrassy mood to it.  And approaching it in that way, it doesn’t work too bad.  Not too-oo bad.

That would be great to hear in a bar.  I love “She shot a girl in reno, just cause I said hi.”
Good one.

I’m not sure about lyrics and how simple they should be, I’m sure if I read Dylan’s work on paper I’d probably give it a “6” as well, but is it possible to exercise more slant rhyme the obligatory rhyme patterns…slant rhyme would give you more diversity with your vocabularly…

Sounds like a very country song.
I think I’m a little bit scared of
the woman in this song, and a little
confused as to why the guy is still
with her… but that’s country
music for you. ;)

I can see this a a bluesy piece or even an country piece!  a perfect picture of dysfunctional love. I keep reading it hoping for a happier ending though!

That a pretty good lyric, and you couldn’t have chosen a better melody than Folsom Prison.  Good choice.  The one thing I will say is that I’m not extremely fond of the murdering you part, but it works in the overall context of the piece.