thanks very much. It is an old blog and I had been doing much much better since, but right now I’m feeling as if those thoughts and symptoms might be returning :(
Journal, Diary, & Blogging / Aches and pains
It’s funny when people talk about heartache, they think that they are talking about an emotional state of being. But what many do not realise that it can manifest itself in a physical sensation. My heart hurts so much I feel like it will explode from sadness. There’s a sharp, stabbing pain deep inside my chest that strikes every now and again when I am sat and quiet and let my mind stray to certain thoughts. If I let myself, I would suffocate under the weight of these feelings.
And I can’t turn it off. There are no pills that I can take to relieve the tension, this shortness of breath nor to calm the burning. The only thing that will save me is sleep and to keep reminding myself that tomorrow is another packed day with far too many things to be getting on with. The atoms in my mind will be too occupied to conjure up an image of you….My only saving grace.
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effervescentpsyche reviewed Version 1 -
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This is totally true, I don’t think it’s an emotional pain either…I really think that it is phsyical as well. Thinking about tomorrow is what keeps most of us going, hoping tomorrow will be better…I hate the days when I know tomorrow will be worse.
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sjvance reviewed Version 1 -
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Heartache and stress definitely do cause physical symptoms. Very good blog. It relays your feelings very well. I hope this is an old blog and you are doing better.
If I let myself, I would suffocate under the weight of these feelings. -good line, creative.
IndyWalsh reviewed Version 1 -
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It was freaky how much this resembled my current situation.
You were able to communicate this well. I’m not too sure if this was just me, or that other people may be able to relate.
“The only thing that will save me is sleep”—I honestly feel as though you are telling MY story.
You’ve been able to diagnose something in a matter of minutes, that no doctor has been able to pick up.
“The atoms in my mind will be too occupied to conjure up an image of you”—That sounds about right, also.
Thanks for posting that!
Marat reviewed Version 1 -
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Wow , i personaly have been trying to get those word out for years yet everytime i wrote them they came out entirely wrong. Thank you for what ever it means for having the courage to post this. Its a feeling everyone gets at one time or another and should be adresed. I guess all i have to say is good on ya sir/maam
Claire_D reviewed Version 1 -
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This is a subtle, understated lament for someone to come and relieve the hell of modern life with their simple presence. We have felt this, and so this miniature blog blob highlights aptly the commotion our emotional bits go through when groping around the murky nothingness of unrequited love.
Sublimely succinct mini-blogging.
Claire
Auran reviewed Version 1 -
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In your notes, you’ve made it clear to your reviewers that you weren’t attempting to be poetic, but I suggest you turn this emotional prose into a free verse poem. These harsh feelings often turn into cliches, but the reality of their meaning cause one so much agony which leaves you as an empty vessel. Grievance over what I’m assuming is the aftermath of a break up can be converted into physical pain that hurts you, along with the inside as well.
I’m sure you’ve already heard many of the pep talks there is, and they won’t heal you completely. haha I’ll save you that:P I’m for certain your close relationships with others would be more suitable and helpful.
V
Ctoyboy3 reviewed Version 1 -
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As a piece on the emotional causing physical pain this is excellent. Fourth line is that right or is it supposed to be sad? Now do you have problems sleeping? Is it that you lie there trying to sleep and your mind works it’s self to this pain?
SophieCostello reviewed Version 1 -
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I suppose it’s an acceptable piece of writing, though I am very much bothered by the fact that you have chosen to let the last two sentences remain. I liked the fact that there was no “you”, that the text was not addressed to anyone, but merely a thought, a comment, so that people would understand. Remove the last two sentences, concerning the “you”. I think it will end the poem in a much stronger way.
goldenrose reviewed Version 1 -
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I can weel relate to these feelings and I think your natural poetic style really does this emotion justice :-)
M_Bevis reviewed Version 1 -
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This should be expanded, as there is so much more you could say. You got me going, and then I realized that this was it. Each line here could be folded out to more concise statements, and you seem to have a good angle.
Very honest; best part of all.
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