Sci Fi & Fantasy / Catching Zees [21 Mar 2008 | Friday]

Well I left you off at the first part of the Rite of Passage ceremony. The second part was neat I guess, although creepy in its own way. So what did they torture Jillian and Jamie with? Dreams of their worst fears. Let us cut to the chase shall we. Jaime’s is of failure and she dreamed of being alone in the Germany mansion about to be killed by vampires. She suddenly fell into a hole and there was this thing in the dark, maybe a childhood boogie man. It scared me and I wasn’t even there. Jillian’s dream was somewhat scarier for all of us there I think. It consisted of a rage driven Crinos chasing her, and in the end it showed itself to be her and broke the real Jillian’s neck.

After that we just hanged around a bit and well, Alex got into a fix earlier. Lemme just say a bunch of Black Furies wanted to kick his sorry ass because he “supposedly” had a look-see. ;) Anyway so he headed up a tree and we started to talk about out Rites of Passage. Alex-Boring, Zee-Was he there?, Jereth-We all know pretty much., Teal’c-Deliver memorized message, follow an owl spirit on the scenic route, and kick a Wyrm creatures buttocks., Mine-Let’s just say I killed someone dear to me. So then there was supposed to be this feast right? Wrong, Zee ate it…..we ran….he tricked me the damn bastard.

He has this gift called Ice Echo right, well as Teal’c, Alex, Zee and me ran, the Furies were mad as hornets. SO HE DECIDED TO TRICK THEM WITH A REPLICA OF HIMSELF, BUT DID HE TELL ME? NOOOOOOOO! Not knowing this I ran after the replica. Luckily for me Teal’c did some quick thinking and got me out of harms was through the Umbra.

I hate the Umbra, it’s quiet and eerie. But I have to say that I like getting out alive and whole. Phew….So we got out of there in one piece and headed for the plane.

Now this is funny. The ditzy stewardess who freaked out Zee with the owl sprit was back, but I have to say that she did it right this time when giving Zee a robin spirit. However Teal’c is nosy as hell so he had to go over there and look at the pretty spirit. He had pain, agony, and cramps, went to the bathroom and became a mother with a floating blue speckled egg in the toilet….....HAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHAHAHAHA…... (eternity)...That’ll teach him.

Let us just say that we were all exhausted when we finally came back to Germany. I wanted ice cream and Lilith left a note that she was gone to the store, however….Kieo was there. That annoying little Ragabash who is totally after Jillian….die you bugger. Anyway just to make me feel better about the day Zee got behind me while I was getting MY ICE CREAM from the freezer. I tripped over him flat into my lovely, delicious, sumptuous, yummy ice cream. That tore it.

Zee had already caused enough trouble that day. I wanted to kill him. I started to yell at him about the Dalmatian, the feast, the ice echo, ice cream, everything that I have kept quiet on. This was it. My chance to kick this guy?s ass to hell and back. I botched it big time.

I have to say that my anger fries my brain to the point where I don’t think strategically. Let us just say Zee is stronger and faster than me and I got the beating of a lifetime. That little whelp of misery actually maimed me to the point where I couldn’t get up in the morning. Bastard.

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December 23, 2007

DeadEdward

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Well…. this fantasy in a weird form i never saw before… Its fresh and young, but still holds these old traditions of fantasy.
Hell i like it. I don’t think i could read a whole book but this was nice to read.. Indeed i had no idea what the hell u were talking about but not in the mood to go to your journal orso.

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June 28, 2007

Katzbalger

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I have to admit, this type of writing does not have a great deal of appeal for me. First, the action comes off sounding like the play-by-play of some kind of lame role-playing game. The action is inadaquatly described to the point that it is difficult to tell what is going on at any given point. For somone starting out at this point in the story, the setting is inadequatly explained, which is very damaging when your setting includes a rite of passage, evil monsters, spell-casting flight attendants, and characters who become locked in deadly combat for practically no reason and with zero consequenses. The story is just confusing, and with so little that I found it impossible to be drawn into the story.