Lyrics / Shooting Scar

from goodness down to sin
every lie i fall in
i hear your name

beginning to the end
my broken bones don’t seem to mend
it’s all the same

(changes to harder/aggressive stage lvl 2)
now I’m burning in the sun
from all the things you’ve done
where is your shame

(chorus)
from goodness down to sin
and every lie I fall in
I hear your name

(changes to harder/aggressive stage lvl 3)
my will is but a token
though the soul cannot be broken
where is the end

this load I cannot bear
no one seems to really care
its all the same
in the end – its all the same

(chorus)
starting out in heaven
now hell is closing in
no one needs to know
no, no one needs to know

(Al Capella part here)
(I thought I could break free
but the joke was on me
now falling from the sky
bound up in all the lies
the rocks rush up to meet me
and I hope they will defeat me…)

(changes to harder/aggressive stage lvl 3)
(chorus)
falling from the sky
chained up in all the lies
I see your name
rushing up to meet me
I see your… falling from the sky
chained up in all the lies
I see your… falling from the sky
chained up in all the lies… (fades out repeating)

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May 08, 2007

tigger33178

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31	F	Fontana, CA	May 23

tigger33178 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I certainly saw images in your lyrics. Your lyrics reminded me of Lucifer being cast out of heaven; plummeting towards earth. I would like to see illustrative words to ease some of the transitions and bring a clearer picture. Good luck!

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May 10, 2007

by badness

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41	M	Fontana, CA	May 10

Thank you Tig for the review hugs :)
I’m excited that you saw something that at least sounds like a powerful image.  There are a few reasons why I didn’t ‘spell things out clearly’ in my writing.  One reason is its personal, another is to leave room for the readers interpretation, my hope is for this to be able to mean something different to different people.  Does that make sense?

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May 06, 2007

Frogking

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51	M	El Cajon, CA	September 28

Frogking reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

This would work together well with a a metal rock with heavy guitar crunches and dramatic vocals. I don’t really go for this kind of sound although I rock myself and play electric bass. I would only drop in a few specifics in your lyrics to solidify the metaphors used here. Example being: Somewhere tell us where or how you fell, broke or are falling from anyone of these conditions, I’m not real sure that might help. It might work better leaving it vague and let the audience add their own experiences.

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May 06, 2007

by badness

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Thank you for the review FrogKing, I also like the crunching idea with dramatic vocals :)  You’ve brought up an interesting point with providing more depth/background.  I think the first time my wife read this that was mentioned and I had to make the choice of letting the reader draw their own images/conclusions or spell it out.  I’m hoping that by leaving some to their interpretation they may get something closer to their own experience out of it or something more specifically meaningful to them, does that make sense?

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