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Thanks. I’m glad you liked it.

You’re welcome and I’m so glad you liked it. It’s bit of a departure for me.

Thanks for taking time out of your day to give your opinion.
The switch in vocabulary is supposed to be a jolt. It represents the two sides of me. I speak 3 languages, but I still hear that Arkansas twang running through my head. The reference to “they” I thought was pretty clear. I guess it wasn’t. “They” are the pink elephants. Pink elephants being things in my life that are huge and that need to be dealt with, but either I or others in my family are afraid to talk about or change.
Again, though, thanks for your time.

Since pink elephants comes at the end of the poem it is hard to relate ‘they’ to them at the beginning of the poem before ‘they’ are mentioned. And yes, all reviews are the opinions of the people who write them, what else can they be? Pink elephants here are what people see when they are drunk, it’s sort of a cultural joke. Sorry you didn’t care for my take on your poem, I just didn’t get it that’s all. Too bad you didn’t bring up more concrete images like your family and fears and change and all that in your poem and your ability to speak three languages then we might have had a clue.  

I should have mentioned that I wrote this particular poem as an exercise: the subject was streets.
It’s not that I didn’t like your take on my poem, it’s just that I found you came across somewhat harsh. I appreciate the feedback. I guess I just don’t like the “It doesn’t do anything for me”. I feel that there are other ways to let someone know that you don’t care for their work. After all, poetry is someone baring their soul. Is it not? I guess I believe that these types of things need to be treated a bit more gently.

Didn’t mean to be harsh, but I tend to be unfortunately honest and often a bit too blunt, should have said Meh I guess, I’ll try to be more considerate going forward. And yes I understand the sensitive nature of the poet, but I never attack the poet, I try only to critique the craft of the poetry as it stands at the moment, thinking that things that are posted here are works in progress and that people are looking for honest feedback to help them revise their poems. Did not mean to offend at all, just help you refine your poem. Peace!

Thanks :) I’m glad you are so generous as to discuss this with me; to help me resolve it.