Poetry / "Denial's Playground"

it wasn’t an agenda. mere observation. it’s not preachy on purpose and was one of those things that just comes out of you from a conduit that is mysteriously urging you to write. Denying seems to be the task so many doubters reap and it’s a “task” as it takes more for them to deny His existence then it does to believe.  I don’t think my notes convey any promise of proving his existence, only that it observes that mankind is bent on denying it. I’m not quite sure what you’re trying to say in your review. Are you saying to re-write a poem that doesn’t have an agenda to preach into a poem that has one? I feel as if you had a different expectation and since it wasn’t met you have taken away from the literal beauty. Perhaps i should not place any notes on this since they seem to be misunderstood at best. Thanks for your candor.

If we are speaking from an english teacher’s standpoint sure punctuation and placement are keys to a well put together “paper”. However, I DO set out to use pauses, via punctation, to my benefit for the purposes of sound. A poem, in my opinion is more than mere words. It’s sound, whether in a persons’ mind or out through their lips. As this is a poem to be read and merely that, it is not far fetched that I have two sentences consisting of two words each in one single stanza. I’ve seen publications where only one word per line was acceptable. It’s called style and poetic freedom. Emotion, sound and lastly analyzing should be the reader’s first set of impressions. Should a reader be an english teacher, they may think that composition and punctuation is first priority. Don’t get me wrong, I have many editing tasks under my belt and I too know the importance of proper composition and punctutaion as well as spelling, consistency and clarity.

Though I appreciate your time, I feel that you may be disappointed in my style where as others have shared opinions to contrast your negative feedback. I like criticism and look forward in dissatisfying you once again. I am glad you are not someone who’s opinion I care about. I only feel badly for the person who’s motivation you destroy, but not for these finished and polished pieces. I restrain from completing your works as I’ve seen plenty thus far, to convince me we’d indeed clash! Try not to destroy so much, instead try to build up a person. That’s my only advice I walk away from with your redundant obesession with English Teacher rules reviews. I’m not in your class. I’m expressing through words, sound and visual stimulation…therefore I’m not concerned that your anaylitical brain devoid of “Artistic” evaluations cannot wrap around my work. I’d like to see you review with your heart instead of your textbook know how.

If I can tell whose work it is I’m critiquing, I’ll avoid yours hereafter to spare you my opinions. They’re simply opinions after all; everyone has them and none please all.

Sorry but you’ve done this to two of my works that others are touting so I’m finding it hard to accept all negatives and no positives from you. Perhaps I need a thicker skin before going on in this writing feast. I had another unfavorable review that was much nicer to take in and actually thanked the person for opening my eyes. I’m not saying you’re a bad person or that you’re not entitled to your opinion, I just think we both (you and I) have different ways our minds work.  Sorry for being testy and for lashing out. I really am. :) No hard feelings? Hope not.

Please forgive me would be the title of this email if it were an email. I just read your Thanksgiving piece! I’m a fool! You are sheer genius! I commented here as I figured you’d probably not accept a friends invitation from ME. During my reading of your piece, I found myself very much taken aback with fantastic envy as was quickly netted by this unique and capturing style. I read on. I was enthralled by your parallels to the human heart needing to be beaten in order that it’s ripe… thinking this guy know’s how to write! Then I went further and was suspicous about the further prep work of the heart and the sun-dried softened goodies. Either you’re a very witty and honed writer/performer or you are a serial killer that knows how to write. Either way I’m not going to balk at your reviews anymore. I am sorry I acted like a baby and hope sometime down the road, it is all smoothed over. Your ending was precious! I cannot believe that isn’t published, or is it? If it hasn’t been, it should be! Please try to find it in your agenda (notice I stayed away from that organ)to forgive me. If you’ve the time I’m curious what you’d have to say with my Shakespearean writing. It’s not a poem persay, it’s more a play or a figment of imagination. Foster, I’m truly sorry. yes i was feeling guilty after my last comment so I visited your page. So GLAD I did… donya  

I do my best to harbor no ill will towards others, especially in writing critique forums. No hard feelings. I appreciate your willingness to look past my (admittedly) rough reviews. I review as I like to be reviewed, with a critical eye geared towards what I beleive to be improvements. I know I don’t often agree with those I’m given, nor do I expect other’s to wholly agree with mine. I find praise does little to help us grow. Still, I’m grateful for it and I’m glad you liked “Have me for Dinner”.

Honestly, I didn’t just like it. It awakened genuine excitement in me and I couldn’t devour your words fast enough craving more genius with every line, and never was I disappointed. THAT is humbling to my prideful rants. You wrote a truly amazing piece. The excitement I felt was akin to finding an undiscovered superstar in your work. The work itself was beyond mastery in my opinion. I felt that way for a long time after reading it. I had to read it again just to marvel once more. No b. s. at all. Praise is deserved with “Have me for Dinner”. I haven’t gotten to any other works but look forward to delving further. :) ty for holding no ill will. I will learn to take critiques as opportunities for improvement. Thanks for openning my eyes.

Peace,

donya

that’s cool, thanks for your input planetaryexit! Sorry it took so long to comment back, I’ve been overwhelmed by life itself. Thanks again for your words of encouragement!