Lyrics / burning till the end

This lacks a physical, literal scene or story or even just a few images for the listener to grab onto. The burning fire would be stronger as a metaphor if there were a story here.

Overall, this lyric seems to focus in on burning it all down, as though life/love/relationships have no meaningful meaning anymore.  I’m not sure if that is what is intended to be conveyed, but it seems that it is coming from a broken heart that has been severely wounded and left imprisoned by lies, lies that have left the heart angered/imbittered to the point it sees no reason to allow the towers of hope for life/love/relationships to stand, therefore, burn them all down, burn to the end.
Cleverly conveyed, but you seem to focus more on just burning it all down and not on why you feel the need to burn it down.  What’s going on that is making the heart want to burn it all down? Besides the lies, what else has happened that has this heart willing to do away with it all by burning it all to the end?
Those are some questions your listeners might ask as they listen to this lyric.
Generally speaking, though, it has great potential.

Dear Writer,

I immediately started hearing this as a hard rock/heavy metal song which is a good thing. My only complaint is that nothing really stood out as a chorus or a hook section.

I see a lot of people doing this and I don’t know if it’s because they aren’t musicians and, therefore, aren’t thinking musically, or if there is some prevailing thought among lyricist that a chorus isn’t important or necessary in modern music.

There are only a few bands that can get away without really having a chorus in a song but most do. It is the lifeblood of the song; the anthem.

If you think about it this way: I don’t know if you are a Nirvana fan or a fan of Dave Grohl but I’ll tell you if they understood anything they understood how to hook in listeners. They purposely wrote their songs, (and Foo Fighters still do this), like nursery rhymes. Dave says the song isn’t driven home unless the hook is repeated at least 13 times. I don’t know if I agree with that completely, but you get the idea. Less is more, simpler is often better and the hook has to be there.

People listen with their ears first and with their minds second.

Cheers!

R

I really liked these lyrics.  I liked the use of the words and the layout.  I can hear them in a song easily. I believe this is a song about breaking up, at least that is what I gathered from it…  What genre does this song fall in?  I haven’t placed a finger on it.

Overall, I think its really good.  Thanks for sharing!

hi there,

well this was a nice emtional lyric…but it lacked structure to make it into a song…like v/c/v/c and you don’t mention the title at all in the lryic which is very,very important..do you ever hear a song without hearing the title a few times at least, if not more..well i think your a young writer who is a good one that needs developing like all of us so learn more of the craft aspect of writing a song and keep writing and keep the faith..

The lines “You should have known by now
I’ll burn this whole world down” remind me of the rage from Green Day classic Having a Blast. It’s about having too much and deciding to take down everything with you.
Then after you say “Can we live a life of peace and happiness?
I don’t think so…” it is obvious that you cannot forget and forgive. That you already decided to burn everything. I would also make this part a chorus, as it has the most strenght in it.
The only part that is kinda weak is “Your hearts desire
About a burning fire
Where it leaves you
For another liar….” – too many clichees and forced rhymes.
Probably would fit any sub-genre of rock, but it’s up to you to decide what kind of music suits you. Hope it helps!

i really liked this. It was a very easy read, it just had really nice… flow to it I guess.  The only thing I would want to ask for in this would be a chorus. I didn’t really look like you had one.
Very good job though keep it up,