Lyrics / I Love You

Day’s turn to weeks, that turn to months,
True happyness, such pure bliss.
Everything blurs, past is the past,
but I still remember our first kiss.
I still remember how your smile makes me melt
How your laugh drove me nuts
And how you made the funneist faces,
That sometimes I just hate…

When will my memories stop haunting me?
When will you truly be mine?
Life gives me obsticals that I must face
And it must be fate.
But if you become just another memory.
Nothing will ever be the same.
I love you, and that will never change.

I know that sometimes I annoy you
And sometimes I make you want to scream
But please listen to me, please don’t give up on me.
Your touch, is so gentle and loving
Your kiss is so ever passionate
Eyes filled with love, may they never drain.
And if you ever start hating me
My life will be filled with pain…

When will my memories stop haunting me?
When will you truly be mine?
Life gives me obsticals that I must face
And it must be fate.
But if you become just another memory.
Nothing will ever be the same.
I love you, and that will never change.

So what if my ex still loves me?
Who cares if your ex craves you?
We need each other, so what should we do?
Their in the way, pretending our relatiohsip doesn’t exist.
And if this keeps going, we wont be able to resist
What to do? What to say? Will it ever be ok?
I tell them ‘no’ I say ‘go away’ but its no use.
I’m pushing you away, and that’s not ok.
And if we don’t fix this, or change this
We’ll never be, and that’s a chance, I never wanna take.

Cutting off all connections, destroying their connection to me.
I’ll push them away, for I love you.
Do you love me? Is all I’m doing worth it?
Will we be together forever? Will we?

I still remember, clear as yesterday
The time we spent together
The love in your embrace
The way each kiss was rare and un-expected.
And I still remember
How you were always there, always cared.
How you always knew, when something was askew.
And everything is dwindling, becoming the past.
Lives are rushed, and time is crushed.
Feelings are hurt, everything is so aburt.
Alone in my room, only thinking of you.

When will my memories stop haunting me?
When will you truly be mine?
Life gives me obsticals that I must face
And it must be fate.
But if you become just another memory.
Nothing will ever be the same.
I love you, and that will never change.

I love you… I love you… I love—You and that will (Pause) Never Change.

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heatherj00788 avatar General Stranger

July 21, 2007

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heatherj00788 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I like this as a poem. I do not like this as “lyrics”  I can’t identify a beat, or rythm, or a pattern, or even a meaning really (as a song).  Nothing.  I think you need to look over this and find a way to make it appeal more as a song. Unless you want to re-classify it as poetry- in that case it would be rather good! For me, I see no hint of a “song” until the seventh ‘verse’.  It comes together a little more at the 7th. I will leave you with one tip that helped be a little bit- when you write a song just write it. Don’t think of a rythm don’t think of melody, or tempo.  Just write .. just think of how you feel. Or your subject at hand. Nothing else matters when you’re writing LYRICS.  Because if they are good enough, it will be easier to think of the beat, rythm ect. after it is finished.  Good Luck!

aradessacat avatar General Stranger

July 20, 2007

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You’re only 15? Wow. I’d say you know a lot more about love and feelings than most your age. You’re an excellent writer and very descriptive. At the length you have written it I don’t know how it would work as a song. I write a lot of songs myself and you have to keep them within a certain perameter or they don’t work as well. This is definitely a great poem though. I like it a lot. I think whoever it is about should consider themselves lucky to have something so deep written about them. That says a lot about the kind of writer you are. I can see how meaningful the writing was and I don’t know who you wrote about and it still touches me. I don’t mean to sound all mushy on ya, but it is definitely good. Keep writing!!

aquaruischick avatar General Stranger

July 19, 2007

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This is a great piece. You spelled obsticles wrong in a few places.  You could use this as a poem or lyric. I liked how you were in touch with feelings. You’d definitely make readers know what you were saying and what this poem’s feelings are about.  

Keep up the geat writing and do not stop. Use you’re own feelings when writing. Use imagination as well and you’ll have great results.

rori_calhoon avatar General Stranger

July 19, 2007

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There are quite a few spelling errors in it, and it has a real “teen” appeal to it. All in all your lyrics or poem is very good. Mostly because of the relatability (i don’t think that’s even a word) of love. everyone has been in love, or been frustrated with a crush.

Ladyauthor2b avatar General Friend

July 18, 2007

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It’s a little long and I don’t know what song you were thinking about when you imagined this, but I love the way you connect words together. Keep writing. You have a hidden talent. :)

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