Poetry / Hello.

I still dream of you,
A still perfect vision of exotic loveliness.

I still ponder over your lingering fragrance,
Knowing that it will only entice me.

I still imagine the kiss,
We performed so passionately.

Without a thought of practice,
Without rehearsal, without regard.

I still stumble and fall in love with you all over again.

So now I am off to dig more holes, my love.

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December 21, 2008

sagittarius1212

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sagittarius1212 reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

Wow, I can relate to this so well, it is scary…especially the last line. When I read it, I actually gasped!! Great job!!

Donna

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January 22, 2008

SuburbiaBomb

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16	F	United States	October 25

SuburbiaBomb reviewed Version 1 - Read 100% of the Item

It’s sweet.
You do a very good job of explaining the emotion, however there’s not much direction.
I want to know more, what happened, what the persons like, why they broke up.

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July 22, 2007

Hanan

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Hanan reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

O wow that is sooo cute… and ur right it is pretty and short and its self-explanatory… i like it and i would really like 2 c more of ur work here..

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July 22, 2007

BFD

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BFD reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I was with you right up until you had to go off & dig more holes…that kinda seemed to come from left field – wasn’t expecting that…not really sure what that’s about… Makes it seem like it’s either from someone in the military on the front lines digging in, or someone on the chain gang in prison (Disney movie – Holes)...or maybe…and this is even farther out of left field…maybe even a psyco killer who “loved” his victim to death & is remembering her as he goes on to his next victim…

But what ever the holes are about – I did like like. :-)

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July 22, 2007

by saex4u

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lol,.,.,.,lmfao.,.,.,
You me dear have a dark and lovely outlook on life, to which I will not question as I thought it the very obvious, to dig holes so as to fall in them, all the more, to fall in love with such rapture.
So it was the very first hole to which I dug without even knowing. Yet I would have seen it if it wasn’t mine, I would hope.
Thankyou…