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Not a short story. Stories have developed characters and situations. This could be a quote. That said, you do capture the relationship of mother and son quite well.

Wow, talk about putting it out there.  I think you have a valid point and quite the creative way of expressing that point.  I guess the only criticism I have is the quotes should be like so – Mom said to son, “You are like…”  You get the picture.  I definitely appreciate your tone (especially coming from a smart allecky family like mine).  

Thanks for sharing-  Tiddley

I like this.. i fully understand it.. it is sad these days how kids treat their mothers.. It seems like they dont care thatshe gave birth to them and took care of them as they grew up…

I like this but i dont think it belongs in the short story section.. i think it would best go into the qoute sections..

This is a very touching and heart warming qoute.. good luck =)

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August 23, 2007

by newby

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actually i was struggling where to put this. i thought to put it in quote too but doesn’t quote suppose to be short & brief? one of the member also suggest me to put this into quote.

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I think this piece was inappropriately catalogued as a short story. It seems like a very short reflection; interesting, though.

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August 23, 2007

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thanx for the review. i was struggling where to put this to. any suggestion?

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Hmmm… maybe quotes. On second thought, there’s really not an appropriate catergory here on the site. I still wouldn’t call it a short story, but I suppose there’s no better place for it. :)

August 24, 2007

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thanx. we just put here & wait. :-)

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That made me laugh. Enjoyable, at the very least.
In short order, awesome.
Thank you.

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August 22, 2007

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thanx for the review. :-)
is it possible i find out from you which part made you laugh? thank you. :-)

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That’s an interesting turn on how two people would see each other. I never would have thought about how two people can say similar things with different meanings and outcomes. Nice job on bringing it this idea out. I have to say I laughed after reading this.

It may be microfiction, but I smirked.  This style of writing is definitely not for everyone and probably needs to included in a larger collection of work to be appropriately appreciated.

well, as a story, it’s lacking in most things (plot, character development, scene,  etc).  it is an interesting (though well-worn) concept to build a story around…you might want to try expanding it while being ever-weary of the cliched, emo tendencies of stories like these…

I like it. Simple and straight to the point. It gets his message across very well and I found myself laughing when I finished it, being a teenager I know exactly what you were talking about and it is true. Good work man.

I think its sad that some children feel this way about their parents.