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The North Belmont Tribe
I partly felt sorry for these people that i saw; lost and confused with no hope in site. But then i also had a selfish happiness that they where like that. Why? Because then they were one less person to worry about in this world. This world had become filth; and i was apart of it all.
But I also had pitty on them. Just seeing them scuttle around with complete fare in their eyes, not knowing when they where going to get killed next.
The horse stomped his foot as if he was getting sick of watching them as I did. I was a threat to these withering people, homeless and defeated. But they were no threat to me. I had the upper half.
So i roamed the streets with ease, not to worried that there was someone ready to pounce. But there always was someone ready to pounce, always someone watching your every step. I still watched my back even in the safest areas.
My black hooded cloke that i wore draped over the horse quite nicely. Matching the coat of the horse which also made me look quite mysterious and frighting. But that was my intentions. I didn’t want to look aprochable nor a nice person. I needed to look threating and dangerous. Thats how you needed to be in this world. For it had shifted completely in its ways of safety.
I saddled the horse and started to head for the town at the bottom of the hill. Daetona started barking with excitement as if he was ready for a hunt. I whistled him to jump up on the back of the horse because I didn’t want him to make to much of a scene as I entered the town. Silence filled the streets and all was herd was the sound of rubbish floating around and old buildings being hounded by the ghostly wind. The town layed upon your heart and uneasy feeling, like something wasn’t right. This world wasn’t right. Nothing was right. But this just felt wrong. My eyes scanned the buildings, down little ally ways and every dark space. I wasn’t the only one feeling uneasy. The horses ears were pointed high and tight, detecting any strange noises around him. And Daetona was ready to pounce, giving a slight growl deep in his throat.
I was ready to get out of there until a dark shadow slid out from behind a worn down building.
My stomach turned. This wasn’t good. Then Daetona started growling louder as if holding in his bark.And the horses nostrils fleared with every exhale of his breath.
The figure walked with confidence. I looked to their left; not my left, and saw a knife in their hand.
This person could just be as dangerous as me; we both couldn’t see each others face,theirs was in the dark and my hood was lifted. And we both had weapons.
Not that they new how many i had though.
The figure was about five meters away when i could see his face. He stopped. Pointed his knife at me as an instruction.
“What do you think your doing here Dweller?” spoke a husky voice.
I suddenly lost all fare in this person. They showed that they had no idea what there plain was, there was no back up at all and all he had was a knife. I relaxed just a little.
“You look pretty tough with that little knife of yours.”
I had no time for this. I wasn’t here to see this uncontrolled testosterone.
I saw him take a quick look at his stupid knife. He just realized then how pathetic he looked.
I almost laughed. But knew it wasn’t him that made this town feel weird.
“Whats wrong with this town?” I questioned.
He looked at me as if it was my time to be the stupid one.
“Whats wrong with this town? Dont you mean whats wrong with this world?”
It was a fair comment but I wasn’t going to play games to get my answer.
“Answer my question.” I demanded.
He looked at me and frowned.
“The North Belmont tribe” he said through gritted teeth.
Every time I herd that name I would always get a flash of annoying teenagers that used to run around the malls like headless chickens in the old days. Pretending like they had something to do and places to be.
And talking so loud like everyone wanted to be in on their conversations. But really they had no where to be, and had nothing to good to talk about and really no one liked them at all.
This is what the North Belmont tribe is like. They still stick to the same ways as the teenagers that used to live in the good days; just as uncontrolled, rebellious and brainless.
The North Belmont tribe have been causing havoc through small towns. They come in and terrorized the people that have nothing and lately have been becoming worse with there behavior as they grow up. Their confidence has risen heaps over the past years as no one has dealt with them. Its either they are to weak to fight back,or that the bigger tribes haven’t found them as much of a threat yet.
I was apart of the Hill Dwellers and the North Belmont tribe is nothing but a group of kids to us.
Nothing but annoying little teenagers that can’t control there puberty. But this was just getting annoying for me, we had to smack them back into their place or they’ll really do some damage.
“Where are they?” I had to do something now.
The man looked at me with interest.
“What are you planning on doing? These kids have managed to get guns now you know? They killed five innocent people today. For no reason! They just did it to show how strong they where compared to the people here!” His anger was understandable and it was now that we had to do something.
“Stay hidden, they’ll be back.” I advised him. “ And don’t come out with that small knife of yours. Thats not going to save you from death.” I left with a quick kick of the horse and was gone in moments.
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“Just seeing them scuttle around with complete fare in their eyes, not knowing when they where going to get killed next.” I don’t understand the meaning of the word fare in this line. While I think you may the start of a fairly good story here, it does need a lot of work. I understand that this is somehwat off the cuff and you put it out here to get initial reacion, but you should edit your pieces thoroughly. I, for one, find that reading through typos and bad punctuation can slow down a reader and make the story less enamouring bucause it becomes a bit more work to read it. If you are looking for good “reviews” maybe it is best to try and do these things before you post. As I said, it most likely is a good story line, but I had to read through it several times to figure the direction and get a clearer understanding.
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