Poetry / MY TRUEST FRIEND

MY TRUEST FRIEND,

Sleep adorns his torso,

Lying beside him he’s oblivious.

Touch elastic skin,

Stroke black desending hair,

Raining, passionate kiss upon dormant body,

Sacred gift of love is mine.

Death I fear,

Thief of love,

Least you strike,

Take my truest friend,

Make life barren, fragile, lonely,

Wrenching out my heart.

Love in all your majesty,

Is released when two hearts entwine as one,

Such is the mystery.

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November 10, 2007

AndrewKane

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November 09, 2007

A_lot_like_you

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November 09, 2007

ThomasAlan

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August 22, 2007

Lin

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68	M	Australia	September 29

Lin reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Such is life. The handsome & beautiful lovers don’t stay that way. Flowers only last a day or two & dogs are very old at 12. You have created a tidy poem so I don’t have to work out what you’ve said nor do I feel the need to scoop it into word & rewrite it so I can understand it better. Well done. In time you may get the urge to tighten it up & say only the most important things & leave it at that.

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August 22, 2007

solo

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28	M	Silver Spring, MD	November 22

solo reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Your poem I thought is a little confusing but then again that is the beauty of poems such as yours. Only you the writer knows the message it is trying to convey to the reader/ reviewer. It does not strike me as something very groundbreaking as I have read a lot similar to yours. Diction: gotta admit I did enjoy the ending which leaves the reader/ reviewer in a state of awe. I don’t know what I am really trying to say here but all in all I think this type of poetry has been done better before. I am being honest, no hard feelings. But keep it up, thanks for submitting it through Urbis.

:-)

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August 21, 2007

LMPATE

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55	F	Desoto, TX	November 08

LMPATE reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Having come very close to loosing my own husband recently I can very much identify to your poem. It touched my heart. Just to be able to gaze at them, even in their sleep, means so much when you truly love. Thank you for sharing.