Poetry / Background Music

Inside,
You decide.
Where will you go?

Heaven’s a lie.
Tell it to my face-
Solitude.

We are
Imaginary.
Turn the page.

This is home.  
Nothing else matters-
Somewhere I belong.

So close-
I can do it (watch me now).
Numb-

Understanding.  

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ThomasAlan avatar General Stranger

November 19, 2007

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This has a certain ambiguous charm to it.  It’s like seeing a series of intriguing snapshots very quickly.  The trip is interesting, but afterwards it is unclear what it meant.

I recognized some of the titles, but only a few.  If you’d left off the note, I probably would never have made the connection.

Do you have poems wholly your own?  I hope so and look forward to running across them.

One really arresting image/phrase: We are/Imaginary./Turn the page.  It’s rather like having a character from a novel speak directly to you, yes?  ”Cheating” can have it’s benefits…...

jweeble avatar General Stranger

November 19, 2007

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jweeble reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

Very clever, and actually quite good.

Sparkles avatar General Stranger

November 18, 2007

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Lacuna Coil? Heaven’s a Lie is one of my favorites. This is not much as a poem but it does look interesting.

neverisapromise avatar General Stranger

November 18, 2007

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neverisapromise reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

I like this. The style and format in which you did this I like a lot. I look forward to seeing more from you. Happy writing.

arualsuga avatar General Stranger

November 18, 2007

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arualsuga reviewed Version 1 - Read 100%% of the Item

very cool. you like lacuna coil? awesomeness, not many ppl listen to them, that i know of.
i like it a lot, it’s a really cool concept, and it makes sense too.
Have A Nice Day :)

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Loc: Charlotte, NC
Gen: F
Last Login: May 26
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