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Limericks / An Actual Pun
A notorious skinflint was Peter.
He’d not pay dimes to park (what a cheater!).
Got a ticket one night,
So he stacked dynamite.
And, as you can probably guess, he blew the hell out of the meter.
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EAnonymous reviewed Version 1 -
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Now this is a very clever and punny limerick! Though I love how you “blew the hell out of the meter” on the last line, I think it would be more effective if the rhythm was tighter in the previous lines (particularly the second). Bravo on the funny factor, though! :) Keep writing!
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TristanSchaut reviewed Version 1 -
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hey, very funny! the rhythm (meter) is off, but I guess that’s part of the pun. very clever.
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BFD reviewed Version 1 -
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lol…kudos to you for best original subject matter for a limerick i’ve read yet…i like that guy…lol…i’d like to hear more limericks about Peter’s mischief :-)
Dharma_Bum reviewed Version 1 -
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Hee hee.. A wonderfull little ditty about parking meeters. Your second line is kind of forced though, maybe find a way to make it flow a bit smoother.
PoeticPrincess reviewed Version 1 -
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This limerick was very amusing. Good work.
brahmasong reviewed Version 1 -
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oh ha that was rich bro rich!
Noburo reviewed Version 1 -
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Well this is a good idea for a limerick. The last line just doesn’t flow. You might change it too.. “and a thousand feet high went the meter!”. You might eliminate “dimes” from line two also.
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