Romance / Hostage to her Heart-Chpt 30- Easing into a civilian world

        A natural progression of events occurred when Danny returned to Wilshire in late September, around the 26th. First, he arrived two days before Tara’s 20th birthday, which fell on a Friday.  With a belated late July birthday and Naval homecoming to go with it, everyone gathered at his parent’s house to celebrate. Tara delighted to see the balloons and streamers as they entered inside the living room. The children seemed fascinated by the colorful floating items. Helen made a fancy cake while Marta prepared a splendid meal. Michael and Sammy bought too much wine. Everyone pitched in to buy the couple presents for their home and for each other.  For all to be together for such a fun occasion seemed overdue.

        The whole time, Danny’ siblings took notice of how the couple looked upon each other. Tara snuggled close to her husband on the couch, grasping his arm, staring up at Danny’s features as if in la-la land.  He caressed her face, squeezed her fingers tight. Occasionally, they kissed.    

        “Well, it’s about time,” Sammy said by the punch bowl, while observing them lock lips again. His brother didn’t agree.

        “I suppose,” Michael muttered, frowning. Sammy looked up and stared at Michael in the eyes. His lips thin in a determined grimace.

        “It better remain that way. No more interference!” Sammy walked away to stand by the hearth, leaving Michael to feel admonished.

        Beside him, Helen beamed at the happy couple. Her heart soared that her one daughter-in-law basked in giddy happiness. In several ways, it seemed reminiscent of the time when she made up with George, after her affair. With strong love and conviction, the couple would see things through from now on.

        “It’s so good to be home. I missed these little ones!” Danny said as they all conversed after eating too much cake. The icing, sweet and tasty, produced a sugar high for everyone. The children became restless. Vincent fussed over a toy with Jamie. Matt pulled the pillows off the sofa. Tyler tugged on Tara’s leg. Edward…well…was just being Edward, temperamental and scowling at Tristan as they sat playing blocks nearby. Eric came to hug on Danny’s knee to get his attention too. All of a sudden, tired of redirecting their cooped up energy, he offered Eric something silly to burn off steam.

        “How about a pony ride?”

        He dropped onto the middle of the spacious floor so Eric could climb on. The boy grabbed hold of his neck and Danny grasped his body too. Then upon his knees, he scooted across the floor, moving his back and shoulders in a ziz-zag fashion, making the boy squeal in delight. Everyone watched for a moment or two.  

        “Hmmf!” George sputtered and then placed his pipe onto the mantel. He dropped down so Tyler could cling to his back.  Everyone opened up their mouths wide. They couldn’t believe it!

        “Hey, I want in!” Sammy yelped, seeing that his stern father actually smiled. He dropped down to join them.  The children clapped with delight to ride their backs. Helen placed a hand over her mouth, trying hard to contain her glee. Grams leaned forward in the chair; eyeglasses perched upon the edge of her nose. She stared down at George, “I’d never imagine he would try!” The old woman laughed. The others helped guide the children on and off safely. At one point, Susan removed Tristan and handed him off to Gloria. Sammy waited for another child and Susan’s eyes glowed with an idea.

        “Sammy, I want a turn!” she cried out.  The younger woman plopped herself on and unmercifully swatted him upon the back side.  He stared up in disbelief.

        “Don’t hit me! Get off, you minx! You’re heavy!”

        Sammy rose to his knees to throw her off balance. Susan, agile and stubborn, wrestled to stay on. Long legs in blue jeans wrapped around his waist tight. Her arms firmly locked about his head.  She refused to be thrown off

        “Ow! I can’t see! Stop it, Susan! Stop! We are not kids anymore! For God’s sake-Mother, help me!” Sammy complained.

        “Oh, my!” Danny gasped, collapsing against the couch. Tears of laughter rolled down his face as he watched the onslaught. He felt so glad to be not the one she picked upon. The children delighted to see their aunt swat Sammy’s behind every few moments. The sharp slap held their merry attention. Susan, caught up in the gleeful melee, smiled brightly. A child again, this only brought her joy as she could recall those carefree days of her youth when she and Sammy use to pillow fight or wrestle in the yard. They always had their noses in the corner for getting out of line.

        “Now, you’re going to get it!” she cried out. Unmercifully, as he collapsed down onto the rug, her fingers ambushed all sides. Sammy’s voice rose high in a soprano octave as he gasped for air, “Oh, stop! You win! I give!”  She knew the right places. Sammy, now doomed, fell flat upon the rug, his face all red, weakened in snickering anguish.  

        “Ah, you are such a wimp!” Susan cried out, arms high in the air like a victorious boxer. She was happy to bring down such a strong brother and jumped off his back, looking about the room. All laughed too hard and gasped for air.  For once, she delighted in the fact that Tara and Danny brought about this happy occasion. She loved the children being there. It felt like old times, before all her siblings grew up and became wrapped up in their lives.  

        Tom sat next to Tara on the couch and his cheeks were red from giggling. With dark flashing eyes and a sharp dimple showing, he looked  much like his father. Susan could not contain herself and scooped the boy upon her lap as she fell onto the couch. Without a thought, she hugged him tight, such love showering upon him like rain.  If only Ross could be there. Susan prayed. How nice if he could gain favoritism again with the family. Somehow, this must happen.

        During that weekend, the Cross siblings visited, talked and caught up about everything happening in their adult lives. Yet, it seemed inevitable to go about their separate ways that Sunday afternoon. The decorations were put away and the staff busied themselves tidying up the Grand Manor.  Haskell made sure that the servants did a spit spot job. He escorted a servant to the china hutch in the dining area.

        “Remove this setting out of the cabinet. It wasn’t shined correctly. I’ll show you how it’s done, so you can redo them,” he reprimanded a new servant. She didn’t clean the silverware used that weekend to his satisfaction.

        “Yes, sir,” she said, noting that he didn’t sound angry. She went to get it out of the cabinet and turned around to face him again. He wiped his brow and loosened his tie. Then he clutched his heart, “Are you all right Haskell? You look green!” she panicked.

        “I don’t know,” he sputtered and slumped into the nearest chair. His eyes grew wide and then he bowed his head with eyes shut tight.

        “Oh, my! I think he’s dead! Mr. Cross! Mr. Cross! Come quick!” she called out as she slammed shut the cabinet doors.

        The police, summoned right away, deemed that he died of natural causes and so nothing further became warranted from them. Haskell’s living sisters in Lincolnshire were notified and the local mortuary service took his body away.

        A week went by and the family attended his funeral, which everyone thought the service seemed quite stately for such a noble man. However, after a weeks time, the servants in the manor became ruffled. “Who’s going to divvy out our assignments?” They asked, “Who gives our orders?” Someone needed to take over, but it would be difficult to replace Haskell, simply because the gruff man was well liked and adored by the staff.  They admired his distinguished duty to the Cross family. Yet, George, busy with the incidental meetings in London and the occasional invitations to political and society parties in the county, didn’t want to fool with it.

        “I can’t be bothered with such nonsense to hire someone else. Your mother doesn’t have time either. She’s accepted membership for far too many committees this year. I don’t know what she was thinking,” He complained to Danny one day, which made his son sigh. His parents were too involved in their social hobnobbing. Danny had time on his hands. Lots of it.

        “Ok, fine. Let me see what I can figure out,” he told his father, but he took on everything himself- to oversee the management of both households. Besides, it gave a great opportunity to visit often with his favorite grandmother. She had returned from Cornwall that summer, when Tara was away saving her marriage.

         “It makes me happy that you forgave her,” She told Danny, “Time is so precious. My brother is not doing so well. He may pass by the end of the year. Of course, at my age, I worry too.”

         Death was not easy to speak of, but Danny was glad she shared her fears with him. He patted her hand and kissed her brow.

        “We love you, Grams. You’ll be around longer.”

        Yet, he did have a fear that she would soon succumb to old age.  Danny couldn’t bare this thought. So all during the month of October, he relished playing cards with her daily. It gave them time to talk about lots of things. He didn’t mind sharing at all, especially about his private life.

        “Are you happy, Danny? Your eyes are glowing,” Grams observed one afternoon as she picked up a card from the pile. Danny studied her behind his own cards. Blue eyes twinkled mysteriously.  

        “Yes. It is good to be home, Grams. Things are so splendid, that I believe I may burst with glee sometimes. Everything is as it should be.”

        “It’s your lovely wife, isn’t it?” she observed. He nodded with heart full of emotion.

        “She’s totally different, so very attentive and loving. It’s hard to decipher how this change came about, but at night…ah, Grams! At night…it’s complete magic. We are in another dimension, another world, where I am king. I want to jump out of my skin! I want to shout!” he revealed in a tone still reverent to the fact that she was his grandmother, older and wise. Still of all people, Grams would know what was insinuated. She placed her hand upon his across the table.

        “Treat her well, Danny, with respect and patience, and that love will only blossom. Treat everyone in your household accordingly. You are a king, at the Briggs House. It’s already fully blessed.”

        Danny nodded and went about his business, mindful of everyone’s place in the scheme of things. The servants there were very pleased that he depended on their advice and insight. Especially Marta, who coddled to his every wish.  Even Tara easily allowed decisions to flow without much interruption.  Like a commander on a ship, Danny first evaluated how everyone functioned.

         All the children slept through the night, even Tom. It didn’t seem necessary for twenty four hour help to continue. First, the couple was capable of rising if one child cried out for some reason. Second, this allowed privacy. And Danny wanted that privacy with his wife.

        One afternoon, while Sammy was on leave, he opened up for discussion his favorite topic, women. Seeing that Danny looked exceptionally happy, he couldn’t resist asking how things were going.

        “Here I am always telling you everything about my escapades,” he began as they walked down to the stables, “I leave nothing hidden, so tell me the truth.”

        Yes, now the tables were turned and Danny had something to gloat about, which seemed like a miracle.

        “Ahh, it’s incredible, really, to have such a tempting, hot, naughty wife! It’s like some crazy windfall.”

        “That’s great, but how so?” Sammy encouraged, his curiosity up, “Come on and spill the beans. I always tell all the details. Spare me none.”

        Sammy jabbed at Danny’s side, all in brotherly interaction. They grew up so incredibly close and Sammy always had the better outcome with women. Yet, the ones recently were one time flings. There was nothing substantial about the relationships. For once, Danny possessed something very real and strong. It wasn’t difficult to see that Tara looked upon her husband with desire and adoration at the party. Even for how he admonished Michael to back off, Sammy, too, felt quite envious of their marriage.  With all the physical changes she made in the last five months, Tara seemed beautiful and tempting. So what was it like to be with such a woman?

        “Well, let’s just say that she becomes this spirited, willful persona, just as soon as we put the children down to bed,” Danny said as he followed beside Sammy. His cheeks were visibly red and there was a crazy smile upon his face. Even his voice sounded bewildered, “She comes onto me like clockwork behind closed doors. Every time I come to bed, she begins. I don’t have to do a thing. What sane man would question that kind of energy? Still, I find myself amazed after all we have endured. If you had told me we’d be this way three months ago, I wouldn’t have believed it.”

        Danny shook his head and leaned upon a rail as Sammy offered the horse behind it bits of apple that he brought along. There was no one around as the foreman was busy in another pasture. They were free to converse openly. Danny’s eyes were beaming.    

         “With the servants around by day, it’s difficult to find a moment alone, but she finagles it. We’d be in the kitchen one minute, and then the next, Tara’s grabbed me by both hands to run to the basement. She stands at the door, ensuring that its lock. She has that look in her eye, the one that sends me to the moon. Then she comes down the steps just to throw me against the machine and get her way.  It’s so crazy!”

        “Ahh … the quickies!” Sammy said, enlightened with the scenario, “You have turned into teenagers at forbidden play!”

        “No, perhaps rabbits!” Danny laughed, “I can’t tell you how this blows my mind! So, I am rearranging the staff help so we can get moments to ourselves. It would be embarrassing if one stumbled upon us in a compromising position. Not all the rooms are possessed with locks!”

        Sammy never laughed so hard. His brother’s wit was getting better. Danny’s face turned a deeper shade of red, but he laughed along too. Happy that for once he could boast about his woman and their terrific passion! The nights were the best times since he came home. As he laid on their bed, staring out the window, holding Tara so tight as she slept with her head on his chest, it seemed that the stars finally smiled down upon him and the moon bore witness, too.

        With all this on the back of his mind, he announced his plans to the servants the next morning, speaking to Marta first.

        “I think it’s best you and Lila continue your role. The children are use to you,” he said as they stood near him in the kitchen, “You can come around ten and go home at supper. I think we can manage the children’s breakfast time. Caroline can come by if needed for a special occasion. She can return to regular duties at the manor as before. Over all, you have done a splendid job while I was away. I cannot express enough appreciation. However, it’s time that we take over the children as much as possible as their parents. It’s only right.”

        “It will be nice to see my family in the evenings,” Lila smiled, thinking this seemed a good time to make the changes. The children needed a firmer hand to direct their full energy, “Thank you sir. It sounds really good.”

        Caroline picked up her scarf to place around her head. She walked towards the front door.

        “Thanks for understanding about those phone calls,” she told him before exiting, “I didn’t have a choice then.”

“Yes, I realize now,” Danny said and Caroline smiled. She went down the lane to return to the manor.

        “It will be a little different, sir,” Marta said and went back to her cutting board to slice up a few lemons for lemonade, “However, the children need a fulltime father.  How happy this makes your wife too. The woman is beaming!”

        “She isn’t the only one,” Danny said and smiled, with his hands upon his hips, as he looked around the rooms. Marta placed the lemonade pitcher into the refrigerator and took out the ingredients to make fresh bread for their evening supper. She turned on a nearby radio and hummed along with the song. Lila walked about the living room, sprucing up the pillows, and placing some of the toys into a nearby playpen.  Two loads of laundry lay inside a large basket next to the basement door. There were two loads already downstairs. Lila planned to take care of these next. It seemed like both women would be occupied for a little while.

       He could hear Tara’s voice drift out from one of the children’s room as she read out nursery rhymes. The children had settled down for an afternoon nap. Perhaps they could get in a nap of their own too.  The thought seemed tempting. Any chance to lay next to her was a grand opportunity. And so Danny ran upstairs to tell his wife about this sudden idea. He knew what could happen once they locked the bedroom door.

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MrEff avatar General Stranger

September 15, 2007

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You’ve got the base of a good novel here. There are plenty of characters and their interactions are interesting. However the flow of the story is pretty frenetic. You can afford to add some more details about the situation, or the emotions of the characters. Also the diction is a bit awkward; it’s just one of those things you learn by experience. You might try simplifying the dialogue a little—long complex sentences work well for the narration, but conversation is mostly simple and direct.

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September 11, 2007

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Hey mate its awesome stuff youve written here,Im notusually really into reading such long novels and\or short stories because I dont have the time and patience but Im glad I stopped and read this because I found this piece quite cool.
You had my attention from the first line onwards.
Keep up the great work mate, its just awesome stuff.

Amy

Kyia avatar General Stranger

September 11, 2007

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It was slow to get into at first. But the more I read the more I liked it. I wanted to know more about each character. It was a little hard to tell who was a child and who was an adult. Or who belonged to whom. But over all it was good. I would like to read more when you have written it.

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September 10, 2007

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I see you took some of my suggestions as well as some of the other reviewers to heart. I think you really improved this section in a lot of ways! And you didn’t waste any time either. You had a new version posted the day after I read the last. You are clearly a hard working and determined writer. This and your talent will see you through to being published, and I have no doubt you will. Here are a few things that still stuck out, but not much to say.

For all to be together for such a fun occasion seemed overdue. (I noticed this before, but I thought there were bigger issues at the time. It just sounds awkward.)

        “It better remain that way.” I don’t understand what this bit of dialogue means. I tried to figure it out, but no luck.

“That’s great, but how so?” This strikes me as another weird bit of dialogue. I think you could stand to get rid of “but how so” and move straight on to getting to trying to get him to spill the beans.

That’s really about it. Much improved all around. Great job. My only recurring issue is that a lot of it seems “summarized”. My opinion is that if a part is able to be summarized, it likeley isn’t very important, so it probably can be eliminated without hurting the story.

Hope this helps. Can’t wait to read more!!!

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September 10, 2007

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Thanks for writing a great chapter! I really enjoyed your writing style and I’m looking forward to reading more. I find your use of descriptive words to be appropriate and moving. If you have any published works, let me know and I will pick it up the next time I am at Barnes and Noble!

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September 09, 2007

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I haven’t read the previous chapters, but do you really need ”, on the 26th?”
Some vague words like “floating items” (why not balls, or spheres?) or “took out the ingredients to make fresh bread” (why not eggs, flour and yeast). I know the readers don’t want an entire grocery list, but the details are important in helping us get a clearer image. I want to be right there with the character.

“the children need a fulltime father.” Did you mean to write full-time?

Sorry for being so nit-picky. This has the makings of a good story, but like you said, it would be nice for you to show me what’s going on a bit more.

Overall though, interesting read.

Jacquie avatar General Stranger

September 09, 2007

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Romance isn’t my genre so this must a different type (one of your gaols) because I like and find it easy to follow the story. I do think you get a bit verbose and I think it would be smoother readding story if you chopped some words and sentences her and there.”With strong love and conviction, the couple would see things through from now on.” Nit picky – but the from now on doesn’t need tobe there. “Danny spoke to her first, going over his plan a bit.” You don’t have to tell us what Danny is going to say – just let the dialoge do the work. Things like that. But, yes it is easily read.

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September 08, 2007

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You’ve definately got the whole “Writing a different kind of romance” thing down. I’ve not read a lot similar to this peice. It was enjoyable, however, I didn’t feel drawn into it. It felt as though there were things that got too much attention, and there were other points that were deprived of that much needed attention and detail. The characters aren’t identifiable, as the readers have no faces or descriptions to match them to, and the onslought of new people were not introduced slowly enough, they seemed jumbled together. This writing does have potential, it just needs a little work. In short: the story focused on lots of little things, rather than one or two major points, accented with minor assets.

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September 08, 2007

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I will say it is different – as far as your goal of writing a different kind of romance story.  

I have to tell you, honestly, your dialogue is dragging ,and slows the reading process down.  You put a lot of information into what your characters say, and if you’re going to do that, you might want to adjust your sentence structure.

I felt like I was reading a fiction story about a family and the way they interact, as opposed to a romantic writing.  

Your grammar and spelling are pretty close to flawless, except that you do have A LOT of commas.  Commas are great, but if you can adjust the structure of a sentence so as not to use so many, that’s even better.  

Keep up the good work,
-Geisha

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September 08, 2007

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Hey,
I would like to say that if you are not published yet, then I am sure you will be soon. Your writing is very interesting and makes you want to keep reading it.
I did see some errors in your grammer and usage of past,present,and future tense verbs. Watch over usuage of commas and run-on sentences.
Most all gentes follow a set pattern. For Romance its boy meets girl. Boy loses girl. Boy gets girl and they live happily ever after. With both of remaining alive at your story’s end. There are other titled gentres for those who dont care to follow rules. Such as Adult Fiction. In which I prefer to write in because I dont see all love stoires as having happy fairy tale endings.
In any case, I really enjoyed your work and will investagate reading more. Remember, always have a beginning, a middle, and an end. That is the key to everything.
Warm regards,
Mary

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